Nightmare's pawn

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    Seinfeld

    Seinfeld We are the nobodies LPA Super Member

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    Theme: Angst

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    Nightmare's pawn:

    I've been set out in the cold
    as the spawn of your inadequacy
    Neither will nor opinion were left
    to survive your constricting heresy

    I've fought for every breath of air
    and so I consist of no more than scars
    Seared skin and dust inside
    where no-one dares to touch my punctured heart

    Don't hold my hand,
    I know you won't help
    No, don't hold my hand,
    You know how I felt

    ...
    know how I felt,
    know how I felt
    all alone in hell

    I've felt you reaching out to me,
    as I've skipped heartbeats through the perilous dark
    You cried of rabies and rage,
    and so you have driven us both further apart

    Don't hold my hand,
    I know you won't help
    No, don't hold my hand,
    You know how I felt

    ...
    know how I felt,
    know how I felt
    all alone in hell

    Don't hold my hand
    You've brought this hell
    Don't hold my hand
    You've brought me hell
     
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    Red Union

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    I liked it
     
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    aki*lp

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    It's slightly emo, but it's nice :)
     
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    Jesse

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    Reminds me of a mordren like poe. :)
     
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    Jordan

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    It's kinda funny how you wrote 'Theme: Angst' at the start, were you thinking it was like your older pieces when you wrote that? Anyways i thought it was pretty good, it definately conveyed the emotions set in the piece.
     
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    Seinfeld

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    Yeah...I kinda felt it was similar to my older style, when I read it. It's thought out better than my older poems and the wording flows better, but still.

    Also, thank you :)

    @Ataka: Define emo. (just wondering what you mean...^_^)
     

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