Memories Discomfort flooded in the blankness, Eyes shut, nerve wrecking, The thoughts of remembrance, So much of me, consuming These feelings, embarrassment, You're memories, fantasizing The wishes I knew were not To be true/yet memorizing Those times that you let me down, Frowns, with you're satisfaction Applauding, appealing to me My sense of regret, Forget it, its lost, deserted, Creeping on me, what you did, Feeding upon what's left, Dedicating, my life to you're threat, In this world of revenge, One on one, my mistakes Pulverizing me, teaching me, I refused to learn, the lie, Falsehood, but it all comes back to You're defeating memory. please guys...if u hate it tell me..i'll try n improve...n if u like it tell me...i'll be on cloud nine!!! :rawk: rock on!!!
it's nice work, but maybe you should edit the strange numbers cuz it's a bit confusing and makes a block in the reading of it. Great work
i like it , but...yeah i think you already know what i'm going to say...those numbers .....translate please...
well.... i guess here is more! _________________________________ A cold breeze swept my thought, My heart sank/and I didn't breathe, Lay there, stuck, caught/ in the darkness, Yet I didn't breathe; Myself, hollow now, I just couldn';t see, What was this happening, how? No, this wasn't me; And finally;I realized Fate had played with me, I was despised, I realized, Yet I couldn't be me, This is what you thought of me, You left, no we, Just pathetic me. I shuddered in the blank /loneliness, Created confusion dawned on me, Reminding me, my carelessness Consuming, feeding, breathlessly I shut my eyes in the darkness, No taking, no giving With none to pretend, This wasn't the way it was Suppose to be, You weren't there, And the hollowness, And forgotten me _____________________________________ ur comments please!!!
yet another.... Hollow touch It seemed as if it were not so long before, Not so long ago, when the memories tore Most of my thought; tore through most of me No contemplation, no consideration, Of what your reminiscences made of me, Not really bleeding, so you couldn't see, What I am was not to be. I could see you, in the blank visions, Could see myself, see throughout the apparitions, Could hear the shout, the yell of pain, Nothing to regain, all in vain Went down the stairs, cruised through my dreams, A cold stroke caught hold of me, Gripped in fear, so familiar, This hollow touch of yours Is my only cure.
thanks soooo much!!!! well....guess what....another! My abilities It doesn't matter if you count me out, Doesn't matter if you shout out loud, For I've been told that there's a Silver lining to every cloud. It ain't no doubt you may be special My traits, unlike, aren't sensual, Your grab's not gonna let me go, I've found that out so I'm lying low. Your feedback, don't need it no more, I've seen you through and I've seen your core, You snatch away, you also lure You lie in your pit; you've lost your cure. Remember, I may not seem all that strong, My abilities are lighter, atleast they help cope With all your wrong, and they destine me To write this song. I can wait for tomorrow, To mock you with my very own sorrow, You'll be surprised and mesmerized You'll realize, I'm not your lies anymore. My hopes, they'll hold on, showing One day I'll be where you are, throwing All that you've put inside, you'll see My abilities will make the better of me.
Yay, give me more frustrations!!! It must be bored for you, to read my comments everytime But hey, can't help it, your poems are Great! Just keep going
hehe, here's my prommissed post. Ok, I love your poems!!! no, serious I really love your writings, keep up the great work!