my fallen angel...

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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    My Fallen Angel

    Crystallised
    Mesmerized
    As I look deep into you eyes
    So pure
    The lure
    Could you be my only cure?
    My fallen Angel
    In your cradle
    Catch me if you are able
    So deep is your wound
    My only saviour
    How dark is your mood
    Save me please
    From this disgrace
    It’s only you
    That knows my true face


    ok, now with one i was just experimenting alittle with different styles again. let me know if it's bad, good or whatever...

    i need for this writers block to lift! ahhh!
     
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    arT saveS

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    Hey, good job! It's good to experiment with different styles, it helps find which is best for you. I like this a lot, the best I've read from you for a while.
     
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    fallenangel

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    thank you fallintosleep!
    this was one that just came to me relatively pure. i didn't change much of it at all...
     
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    :thumbsup:
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    I agree, this is a great poem, it is different but you pulled it off well. Good work.
     
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    fallenangel

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    thanks you guys :blush:

    i am so glad that i am able to write something now, i was going mad for a while!
     
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    meteoricgirl_kelly

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    that's beautiful
     
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    notneo

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    I like the way you've written it . Its different.
     

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