My Exsistence

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    Anya

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    I missed writing, I haven't written in a while. Please at least check it out lol, I want to know how it sounds and if it's good or not. Tell me if i'm a little shabby with the writing, mmk? ;)

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    -My Exsistence-

    Trace the patterns across the sand
    Devouring the picture as it forms on land
    My creation my world
    My soul my exsistence
    Lies upon the earth as I shadow my persistance
    My tears are folded in my heart shaped box
    Away from your eyes inside it locks
    In the shadows i'll slowly die
    And then you'll know what it means to cry
     
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    Omar A

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    :eek: I've never read your stuff before. This is really good.
     
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    Andrea

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    I really like it but there are some grammar errors:

    Exsistence = existence

    Persistance = persistence


    other than that, very good. :)
     
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    Awesome! I really like the beginning. Its very unique ^_^
     
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    Anya

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    Aww, thanks guys. :)
     
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    um.........what did u write?
     
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    :wth:
     
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    Tony

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    um.........what did u write? [/b][/quote]
    LMAO :lol:

    Oh and great work Anya, I likes it. ^_^
     
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    Casual D

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    um.........what did u write? [/b][/quote]
    Do you purposely act like you don't have a clue about anything or is that the way you are? I know you're a smarter person than this so please don't act like you dont know anything because it's starting to get frustrating.
     
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    Mark

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    Sounds great!
     
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    linkin3544park

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    sorry i just saw what she meant
     
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    Thanks, very much. :)
     

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