Missing Piece

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    The Doctor

    The Doctor I wear a fez now. Fez's are cool. LPA Super Member

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    I wrote this song two years ago during a bad time in my life, this is my fist song EVER

    Verse I
    I wish I could open up your mind
    And search through the hell that is inside
    You always seem like something isnt right
    And I try to help with all my might
    I always wondered what was wrong
    And I figured it was me all along
    Now I'm wondering if I should stay
    And let you hurt me with the games you play

    Chorus
    Inside your mind is a giant puzzle
    With a missing piece in the middle
    Your painful feelings are all concealed
    And you dont even care how I feel

    Verse II
    When I think back to all the fun
    I think "Why is that all gone?"
    You close me off, you shut me out
    Many more times than I can count
    I know you cant hide the pain
    Believe me I feel just the same
    I ask you how to fix this mess
    You tell me some just not the rest

    Chorus

    Bridge
    Just tell me now
    What to do
    I promise I
    Will comfort you

    Chorus 2x
     
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    Casual D

    Casual D I WON'T BE YOUR CASUAL D. LPA Administrator

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    I think its rather good. Especially considering the fact its your first song, not bad at all Nate.
     
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    Omar A

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    Pretty good

    I just think you can make verse 2 better...
     
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    Jµ!Cy

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    Your poem is realy good. The best part is all the first verse...!
    You are realy good!!
     

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