M2M Remix Concept (lyrics only)

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GiVon ^
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I wake with regret again
Another days been blured with hate
In my digrace
Traped in my head again
Feels that I've never control my fate
Like I'll never leae this place
I'm my own worse enemy

I've given up
I'm sick of fighting
Is there nothing you can say?
Take me far away, I'm suffocating
Tell me what the fuck is wrong with me

I don't know which path to take
My eyes are focused but I'm scared
I can't prepare
As I hypervenilate
Looking for help somehow, somewhere
It's not like you care

I'm my own worst emeny

I've given up
I'm sick of fighting
Is there nothing you can say?
Take me far away, I'm suffocating
Tell me what the fuck is wrong with me

Put me out of my misery
Put me out of my misery
Put me out of my
Put me out of my fuckin suffering!

I've given up
I'm sick of fighting
Is there nothing you can say?
Take me far away, I'm suffocating
Tell me what the fuck is wrong with me

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Levout allda rest
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I dreamed that I missing, you were so scared
Yet not a soul would listen, because not a soul cared
While after my dream I woke with this fear
What am I leaving, after my times gone here?

So if you're wondering ,I want you to know

When my time comes, forget the wrong that I've done
Help me leave behind some reasons to be missed
Don't resent me, and when you're feeling empty
Keep me in your memory, leave out all the rest

Leave out all the rest, don't be afraid
I've taken my beating, I've shared what I made
I'm strong on the surface, not all the way through
I've never been perfect, but neither have you

[Rap]

Keep me in you memory, just don't throw me out into the black and empty
Forget the mistakes that I've made, try to mold them as if they were clay
Burn the doubts and fear while I'm still here. Im strong on the surface but not
way down deep to my roots. I never achived perfection and neither will you

So if you're wondering, I want you to know

When my time comes, forget the wrong that I've done
Help me leave behind some reasons to be missed
Don't resent me, and when you're feeling empty
Keep me in your memory, leave out all the rest
Leave out all the rest

Forgetting all the hurt inside you've learned to hide so well
Pretending someone else can come and save me from myself
I can't be who you are

When my time comes, forget the wrong that I've done
Help me leave behind some reasons to be missed
Don't resent me, and when you're feeling empty
Keep me in your memory, leave out all the rest
Leave out all the rest

Forgetting all the hurt inside you've learned to hide so well
Pretending someone else can come and save me from myself
I can't be who you are

I can't be who you are
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|31337 et owt
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Yea here we go for the hundredth time,
Two gernades in each hand while I'm in line
Throw 'em up like you've lost your mind
Thinking back to all my fucking crimes
Filthy mouth, no excuse.
Find a new place to hang this noose.
String me up high from atop these roofs.
Knot it tight so I won't get loose.
Truth is you can stop right there
With your eyes wide while you stare
bled myself out and no one cares.
Dug a trench out, laid down there
With a shovel up out of reach somewhere.
Yea someone pour it in,
Wait right there 'til I begin
Make it a dirt dance floor again.
Say your prayers and stomp it out,
When they bring that chorus in.

[chours]
I bleed it out digging deeper
Just to wish it away

I bleed it out digging deeper
Just to watch it fade

I beed it out digging deeper
Just to throw it way, just to throw it away, just to throw it away

No time to go, or to stop this show
You chop your words in a sloppy flow
Shotgun opera ready to go, lock and load
Cock it back watch it go, before it explodes
Someone help me, I've been cursed
A trillon spells in solid dirt
Death is rolling in every verse
Candy paint on a brand new hearse
No one contains him while he blurts his words,
With no remorse
Fuck this hurts, I won't lie
Doesn't matter how hard I try
I try to stop these thoughts of suiside
Half the words I can't explain
And I know I won't be satisfied
Yeah someone throw me in,
Make it a dirt dance floor again
Say your prays and stop them out
When they bring that chorus in

[Chorus]

I bleed it out
I've opened up these scars
I'll make you face this!
I've brought myself so far
I'll make you face this

[rap]
I bleed it out
You've opened up your scars
You're lost in your paces
telling me to face it, this
unexplainable pain, saying that it's not a game
you bleed your thoughts, from the truth you've sought
from all the lies you've bought.

[Chorus]
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Sha-do Uf The Day
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I close both locks on the window
I close both blinds before I turn away
Sometimes solutions aren't so simple
Somtimes good byes the only thing to say

And the sun will set for you
Taking the place of the desolate moon
And the shadow of the day
Will embrace the world in grey
And the sun will set for you

In cards and flowers on your window
Your friends all plead for you to stay
With emotions captured in photos
The memories will never fade
Sometimes beginnings arn't so simple
Sometimes good byes the only way

And the sun will set for you
The sun will set for you
And the shadow of the day
Will embrace the world in grey
And the sun will set for you

And the shadow of the day
Will embrace the world in grey
And the sun will set for you

And the shadow of the day
Will embrace the world in grey
And the sun will set for you

And the sun will set for you
Taking the place of the desolate moon
And the shadow of the day
Will embrace the world in grey
And the sun will set for you
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Wat Eyve Dawn
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In this farewell
Theres no blood
no alibi
Cuz I've drawn regret
from the root
of a thousand lies
So let mercy come
And wash away

What I've done. I face myself
To cross out what I've become
Erase myself I let go of all I've done

Put to rest, what you've thought of me
while I clean this slate
With the hands of uncertainty
So let mercy come and wash away

Let forgiveness invade and wash away these stains
I cross out the past with invisible ink, hold on get ready
there's no time to blink. Think, if we held on to all our wrons
what will we ever get done? Better to let the past be past
and let the future come first rather than last

For what I've done
I start again
And what ever pain may come
Today this ends
I'm letting go of what I've done

What I've done. I face myself
To cross out what I've become
Erase myself I let go of all I've done
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Hands H317 Hi
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Turn my mike up louder I got to say something
Light weights step to the side when we come in
Feel it in your chest the syllables get pumping
People on the street they panic and start running
Words on loose leaf sheet complete coming
I jump in my mind and summon the rhyme, I'm dumping
Healing the blind I promise to let the sun in
Sick of the dark ways we march to the drum and
Jump when they tell us that they wanna see jumping
Fuck that I wanna see some fists pumping
Risk something, take back what's yours
Say something that you know they might attack you for
Cause I'm sick of being treated like I have before
Like it's stupid standing for what I'm standing for
Like this war's really just a different brand of war
Like it doesn't cater the rich and abandon poor
Like they understand you in the back of the jet
When you can't put gas in your tank
These fuckers are laughing their way to the bank and cashing the check
Asking you to have compassion and have some respect
For a leader so nervous in an obvious way
Stuttering and mumbling for nightly news to replay
And the rest of the world watching at the end of the day
In their living room laughing like "what did he say?"

[Chorus]
Amen,

I scream!!! Making you see,
what it is, that is traping me!
Let it be! So be it!!! This is true!!!
Let it be! So be it!!!! These words speak truth!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
[End Chorus]


The chorus sings in my head, remembering all the soliders that got away before they died. Before the bombs exploded right in front of their eyes. They escape trying compare it to being worse than suicide, and before they have to take the dive for the rest of the team, realizing that it's not just a dream. that these guns in their hands mean life or death. to find out that life is not just a test. The chorus that screams in my head is seemingly endless atomic in it's honest truity.

With hands held high into a sky that turns to grey from blue
The storm clouds open up before they fall on you

In my living room watching but I am not laughing
Cause when it gets tense I know what might happen
World is cold the bold men take action
Have to react or get blown into fractions
Ten years old it's something to see
Another kid my age drug under a jeep
Taken and bound and found later under a tree
I wonder if he had thought the next one could be me
Do you see the soldiers they're out today
They brush the dust from bullet proof vests away
It's ironic at times like this you pray
But a bomb blew the mosque up yesterday
There's bombs in the buses, bikes, roads
Inside your market, your shops, your clothes
My dad he's got a lot of fear I know
But enough pride inside not to let that show
My brother had a book he would hold with pride
A little red cover with a broken spine
On the back, he hand-wrote a quote inside
When the rich wage war it's the poor who die
Meanwhile, the leader just talks away
Stuttering and mumbling for nightly news to replay
And the rest of the world watching at the end of the day
both scared and angry like "what did he say?"

[Chorus]
Amen
I scream!!! Making you see,
what it is, that is traping me!
With hands held high, I cry
Can you deny that this war
is suicide!?

I scream!!! Making you see,
what it is, that is traping me!
Let it be! So be it!!! This is true!!!
Let it be! So be it!!!! These words speak truth!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

With hands held high into a sky so blue
As the ocean opens up to swallow you

With hands held high into a sky so blue
As the ocean opens up to swallow you

With hands held high in a sky that turns to grey from blue
The storm clouds open up before they fall on you.

With hands held high in a sky that turns to grey from blue
The storm clouds open up before they fall on you.

With hands held high into a sky so blue
As the ocean opens up to swallow you

With hands held high into a that fades to grey from blue
The black clouds open up before they swallow you.
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Know Moore Sorrow
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I know your lost in you lies
But why do you tell youself you don't realize
That your crusade' just a disguise?
You've replaced freedom with fear
Traded money for lives
I'm aware of what you've done!!

GO!! No more sorrow
I've paid for your mistakes
Your time is about up
Your time has come to be replaced

I see their pain, I see their need
I see the liars and fiends
That only abuse power with greed
I had hope, I believe
But I'm beginning to think that I've been deceived
You will pay for what you've done

GO!! No more sorrow
I've paid for your mistakes
Your time is about up
Your time has come to be replaced

Face this, Hypocrite
Face it, Hypocrite
Face this, Hypocrite!!

GO!! No more sorrow
I've paid for your mistakes
Your time is about up
Your time has come to be replaced

GO!! No more sorrow
I've paid for your mistakes
Your time is about up
Your time has come to be replaced

Your time has come to be replaced
Your time has come to be washed away
Your time has come to be erased
Your time has come to be replaced

Your time has come to be washed a way
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Voulentines Dai
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My insides turn to ash
So slow.
And blew away as I collasped
So cold.
A black wind blew away
From sight.
Another darkness over day
That night.

And the clouds above moved closer
Looking so dissatisfied
And the heartless wind kept blowing, blowing

I use to be my own protection
But not now.
Cuz my path has lost direction
Somehow

A black wind took you away
From sight.
Another darkness over day
That night

And the clouds above moved closer
Looking so dissatisfied
And the ground below grew colder
As the put you down inside
And the heartless wind kept blowing, blowing

So now you're gone
And was wrong
I never knew what it was like
To be alone

[Rap] My path is lost, just like the mixed directions I've walked in solitude while in the dark I went over my thoughts after you left without a good bye, and without a reason as to telling me why Now I just sit here, not feeling a thing. My heart is crushed just like a birds broken wing But one thing about todays pain is that it's eternally more. Looking out the window remembering all the days before when I wasn't at home and all alone
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On a Valentines Day(x6)
[in background]
I just to be my own protection
But not now
Because my mind has lost direction
Somehow
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En Batwin
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Stays the same just acustic guitar and chester sining "And I cannot" part
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En Pi-siz
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Telling me to go, but hands beg me to stay.
Your lips say that you love, your eyes say that you hate.
There's truth in your lies, doubt in your faith
All you built you've laid to waste,
There's truth in your lies, doubt in your faith
All I've gots what you didn't take

And I, I wont be the one.
Be the one to leave this, In pieces
And you, you will be alone, alone with all your secrets
And regrets, Don't lie

(Rap Verse)

Lie about all the things you've had before
When you kept telling me you've always loved me more
And now in peices you will see, that every pain that you've made for me
I will take it all away and set them free,
Breaking the ache inside my heart that only wants to feed
(It only wants to feed, it only wants to feed)

You promised me the sky, tossed me like a stone
You wrap me in your arms, and chill me to the bone
There's truth in your lies, doubt in your faith
All you built you've laid to waste,
There's truth in your lies, doubt in your faith
All I've gots what you didn't take

And I, I wont be the one.
Be the one to leave this, In pieces
And you, you will be alone, alone with all your secrets
And regrets, Don't lie

Like all the things you tell yourself inside your head
Trying to create excuses to make me feel like I'm dead
But you are the only one that will be filled with dread
Not going to let your childish ways inside my head
Intead, I'm gonna embrace the mistake that you've did
Because now I'm free of the lies that you've always said

(Guitair solo)

And I, I wont be the one.
Be the one to leave this, In pieces
And you, you will be alone, alone with all your secrets
And regrets, Don't lie

(the pain it only want to feed on me, it only wants to feed)

And I, I wont be the one.
Be the one to leave this, In pieces
And you, you will be alone, alone with all your secrets
And regrets, Don't lie

(piano outro)
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Lil things giv'ya awai
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(Adds some scracthing, take away the background add eletric guitar,
some hip piano beats, and violin)

Water grey, leaks through the windows
And fill up the stair
Chilling rain
As if an ocean, everywhere

Don't want to reach for me now do you
I don't mean a thing to you
The little things give you away
And no there will be no mistaking
The levees are breaking

All you've ever wanted
Was someone to truly look up to you
Now six feet under water, I do

Hope decays
Generations disappear
Wash away, as a nation kept with fear

Don't want to reach for me now do you
I don't mean a thing to you
The little things give you away

All you've ever wanted
Was something to hold on to
Little things give you away

All you've ever wanted
-Was someone to truly hold on to
Now six feet under ground now
I do

Little things give you away
Little things give you away

Ohhh oh.. ohhhh oh ohhhhhh oh ohhhh ohhhhh.

All you've ever wanted was someone to truly look up to you
Little things give you away (x5)

The little things give you away

 

Your rewritten lyrics don't fit the rhythm of the song.

 

They fit the rhytm of the song inside my head. Sadly I d not know how to write out the rythms I imagine. I can only imagine them as I play no instruments. I know how its suppose to sound though Plus it is NOT a rewrite of the album. It's a REMIX concept and with remixes comes new intros, outros, bridges and things all together.

 

I understand the concept, it's just, take this line for example from Given Up.

Original line:
Feels like I'll never leave this place

Your line:
Feels that I've never control my fate

The way the rhythm of that particular line goes, there are too many syllables to fit into the original pacing of the line. It's very awkward to sing/say to the song in my opinion.

Not to mention there should be a lot of proofreading on lines as well.

 

Someone please pork out my eyes with a stapler

 

You've outdone yourself this time.

 

Hey but seriously, don't be TOO mean to the guy... E for Effort?

 

There is just something about the lyrics that isn't right. Maybe that What I've Done verse was ok. the new one...maybe

 

|31337 et owt? No! Someone get a cross.

 

Well, you do have to guts to post whatever comes to your mind. That's....impressive?

 

pretty much what dude said about the syllables before, and damn... i thought i was gonna be the only mean guy.. but damn... i dont even wanna anymore... lol

 

I mean, seriously. I could make something up on the spot that flows better than this. Try to fit to the rhythm. For example:

Now, take that, and modify it. And just for the purposes of being creative, I'm going to throw in some stuff you may or may not recognize since it's a remix.

No offense if I was offensive in anyway, I was just making some generic stuff up to make a point. You have to try to fit the words to the flow. Even if it is a remix, it doesn't change the time signature or the pacing of the song. The only thing is tempo, and that just (chop and) screws things up.

Oh, and what good are the rhythms you imagine if we can't hear them? Do we just assume that your rhythms work and say, "Hey, good job?"

 

Makino wins post of the day "fa sho"

 

How about this? I call it.

Bleed my doubts

 

The chorus doesnt work on that 'Bleed my Doubts' remix. I think just the one further would do.

imo,

 

no offense or nothing, but it's not really "remixing" if you're changing just a few portions of what is originally written by someone else. also, as discussed above, the syllable counts tend to be all over the place.

 

I'll try one:


Given Up(Underground Pound Remix)

Put me out of

Put me out of

Put me out of

Put me out of

Put me out of

Put me out of

...aaaaaAAAAAaAAAAAHHH!!H!H!!!!!!!!!!! MY FUCKING MISERY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Put me, Put me, Put me, Put me

Put me, Put me, Put me, Put me(x10)

I've given up (Put me, Put me, Put me)
I've given, given, given, given
Given up (Put me, Put me, Put me)


Put me out of my

Put me out of my

Put me out of my

Put me out of my

FUCKING(fucking)

MISERY..ery...ery....ry........y.............y.......y....y