M2M Remix Concept (lyrics only)

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    Jesse

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    GiVon ^
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    I wake with regret again
    Another days been blured with hate
    In my digrace
    Traped in my head again
    Feels that I've never control my fate
    Like I'll never leae this place
    I'm my own worse enemy

    I've given up
    I'm sick of fighting
    Is there nothing you can say?
    Take me far away, I'm suffocating
    Tell me what the fuck is wrong with me

    I don't know which path to take
    My eyes are focused but I'm scared
    I can't prepare
    As I hypervenilate
    Looking for help somehow, somewhere
    It's not like you care

    I'm my own worst emeny

    I've given up
    I'm sick of fighting
    Is there nothing you can say?
    Take me far away, I'm suffocating
    Tell me what the fuck is wrong with me

    Put me out of my misery
    Put me out of my misery
    Put me out of my
    Put me out of my fuckin suffering!

    I've given up
    I'm sick of fighting
    Is there nothing you can say?
    Take me far away, I'm suffocating
    Tell me what the fuck is wrong with me

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    Levout allda rest
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    I dreamed that I missing, you were so scared
    Yet not a soul would listen, because not a soul cared
    While after my dream I woke with this fear
    What am I leaving, after my times gone here?

    So if you're wondering ,I want you to know

    When my time comes, forget the wrong that I've done
    Help me leave behind some reasons to be missed
    Don't resent me, and when you're feeling empty
    Keep me in your memory, leave out all the rest

    Leave out all the rest, don't be afraid
    I've taken my beating, I've shared what I made
    I'm strong on the surface, not all the way through
    I've never been perfect, but neither have you

    [Rap]

    Keep me in you memory, just don't throw me out into the black and empty
    Forget the mistakes that I've made, try to mold them as if they were clay
    Burn the doubts and fear while I'm still here. Im strong on the surface but not
    way down deep to my roots. I never achived perfection and neither will you

    So if you're wondering, I want you to know

    When my time comes, forget the wrong that I've done
    Help me leave behind some reasons to be missed
    Don't resent me, and when you're feeling empty
    Keep me in your memory, leave out all the rest
    Leave out all the rest

    Forgetting all the hurt inside you've learned to hide so well
    Pretending someone else can come and save me from myself
    I can't be who you are

    When my time comes, forget the wrong that I've done
    Help me leave behind some reasons to be missed
    Don't resent me, and when you're feeling empty
    Keep me in your memory, leave out all the rest
    Leave out all the rest

    Forgetting all the hurt inside you've learned to hide so well
    Pretending someone else can come and save me from myself
    I can't be who you are

    I can't be who you are
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    |31337 et owt
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    Yea here we go for the hundredth time,
    Two gernades in each hand while I'm in line
    Throw 'em up like you've lost your mind
    Thinking back to all my fucking crimes
    Filthy mouth, no excuse.
    Find a new place to hang this noose.
    String me up high from atop these roofs.
    Knot it tight so I won't get loose.
    Truth is you can stop right there
    With your eyes wide while you stare
    bled myself out and no one cares.
    Dug a trench out, laid down there
    With a shovel up out of reach somewhere.
    Yea someone pour it in,
    Wait right there 'til I begin
    Make it a dirt dance floor again.
    Say your prayers and stomp it out,
    When they bring that chorus in.

    [chours]
    I bleed it out digging deeper
    Just to wish it away

    I bleed it out digging deeper
    Just to watch it fade

    I beed it out digging deeper
    Just to throw it way, just to throw it away, just to throw it away

    No time to go, or to stop this show
    You chop your words in a sloppy flow
    Shotgun opera ready to go, lock and load
    Cock it back watch it go, before it explodes
    Someone help me, I've been cursed
    A trillon spells in solid dirt
    Death is rolling in every verse
    Candy paint on a brand new hearse
    No one contains him while he blurts his words,
    With no remorse
    Fuck this hurts, I won't lie
    Doesn't matter how hard I try
    I try to stop these thoughts of suiside
    Half the words I can't explain
    And I know I won't be satisfied
    Yeah someone throw me in,
    Make it a dirt dance floor again
    Say your prays and stop them out
    When they bring that chorus in

    [Chorus]

    I bleed it out
    I've opened up these scars
    I'll make you face this!
    I've brought myself so far
    I'll make you face this

    [rap]
    I bleed it out
    You've opened up your scars
    You're lost in your paces
    telling me to face it, this
    unexplainable pain, saying that it's not a game
    you bleed your thoughts, from the truth you've sought
    from all the lies you've bought.

    [Chorus]
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    Sha-do Uf The Day
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    I close both locks on the window
    I close both blinds before I turn away
    Sometimes solutions aren't so simple
    Somtimes good byes the only thing to say

    And the sun will set for you
    Taking the place of the desolate moon
    And the shadow of the day
    Will embrace the world in grey
    And the sun will set for you

    In cards and flowers on your window
    Your friends all plead for you to stay
    With emotions captured in photos
    The memories will never fade
    Sometimes beginnings arn't so simple
    Sometimes good byes the only way

    And the sun will set for you
    The sun will set for you
    And the shadow of the day
    Will embrace the world in grey
    And the sun will set for you

    And the shadow of the day
    Will embrace the world in grey
    And the sun will set for you

    And the shadow of the day
    Will embrace the world in grey
    And the sun will set for you

    And the sun will set for you
    Taking the place of the desolate moon
    And the shadow of the day
    Will embrace the world in grey
    And the sun will set for you
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    Wat Eyve Dawn
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    In this farewell
    Theres no blood
    no alibi
    Cuz I've drawn regret
    from the root
    of a thousand lies
    So let mercy come
    And wash away

    What I've done. I face myself
    To cross out what I've become
    Erase myself I let go of all I've done

    Put to rest, what you've thought of me
    while I clean this slate
    With the hands of uncertainty
    So let mercy come and wash away

    Let forgiveness invade and wash away these stains
    I cross out the past with invisible ink, hold on get ready
    there's no time to blink. Think, if we held on to all our wrons
    what will we ever get done? Better to let the past be past
    and let the future come first rather than last

    For what I've done
    I start again
    And what ever pain may come
    Today this ends
    I'm letting go of what I've done

    What I've done. I face myself
    To cross out what I've become
    Erase myself I let go of all I've done
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    Hands H317 Hi
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    Turn my mike up louder I got to say something
    Light weights step to the side when we come in
    Feel it in your chest the syllables get pumping
    People on the street they panic and start running
    Words on loose leaf sheet complete coming
    I jump in my mind and summon the rhyme, I'm dumping
    Healing the blind I promise to let the sun in
    Sick of the dark ways we march to the drum and
    Jump when they tell us that they wanna see jumping
    Fuck that I wanna see some fists pumping
    Risk something, take back what's yours
    Say something that you know they might attack you for
    Cause I'm sick of being treated like I have before
    Like it's stupid standing for what I'm standing for
    Like this war's really just a different brand of war
    Like it doesn't cater the rich and abandon poor
    Like they understand you in the back of the jet
    When you can't put gas in your tank
    These fuckers are laughing their way to the bank and cashing the check
    Asking you to have compassion and have some respect
    For a leader so nervous in an obvious way
    Stuttering and mumbling for nightly news to replay
    And the rest of the world watching at the end of the day
    In their living room laughing like "what did he say?"

    [Chorus]
    Amen,

    I scream!!! Making you see,
    what it is, that is traping me!
    Let it be! So be it!!! This is true!!!
    Let it be! So be it!!!! These words speak truth!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    [End Chorus]


    The chorus sings in my head, remembering all the soliders that got away before they died. Before the bombs exploded right in front of their eyes. They escape trying compare it to being worse than suicide, and before they have to take the dive for the rest of the team, realizing that it's not just a dream. that these guns in their hands mean life or death. to find out that life is not just a test. The chorus that screams in my head is seemingly endless atomic in it's honest truity.

    With hands held high into a sky that turns to grey from blue
    The storm clouds open up before they fall on you

    In my living room watching but I am not laughing
    Cause when it gets tense I know what might happen
    World is cold the bold men take action
    Have to react or get blown into fractions
    Ten years old it's something to see
    Another kid my age drug under a jeep
    Taken and bound and found later under a tree
    I wonder if he had thought the next one could be me
    Do you see the soldiers they're out today
    They brush the dust from bullet proof vests away
    It's ironic at times like this you pray
    But a bomb blew the mosque up yesterday
    There's bombs in the buses, bikes, roads
    Inside your market, your shops, your clothes
    My dad he's got a lot of fear I know
    But enough pride inside not to let that show
    My brother had a book he would hold with pride
    A little red cover with a broken spine
    On the back, he hand-wrote a quote inside
    When the rich wage war it's the poor who die
    Meanwhile, the leader just talks away
    Stuttering and mumbling for nightly news to replay
    And the rest of the world watching at the end of the day
    both scared and angry like "what did he say?"

    [Chorus]
    Amen
    I scream!!! Making you see,
    what it is, that is traping me!
    With hands held high, I cry
    Can you deny that this war
    is suicide!?

    I scream!!! Making you see,
    what it is, that is traping me!
    Let it be! So be it!!! This is true!!!
    Let it be! So be it!!!! These words speak truth!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    With hands held high into a sky so blue
    As the ocean opens up to swallow you

    With hands held high into a sky so blue
    As the ocean opens up to swallow you

    With hands held high in a sky that turns to grey from blue
    The storm clouds open up before they fall on you.

    With hands held high in a sky that turns to grey from blue
    The storm clouds open up before they fall on you.

    With hands held high into a sky so blue
    As the ocean opens up to swallow you

    With hands held high into a that fades to grey from blue
    The black clouds open up before they swallow you.
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    Know Moore Sorrow
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    I know your lost in you lies
    But why do you tell youself you don't realize
    That your crusade' just a disguise?
    You've replaced freedom with fear
    Traded money for lives
    I'm aware of what you've done!!

    GO!! No more sorrow
    I've paid for your mistakes
    Your time is about up
    Your time has come to be replaced

    I see their pain, I see their need
    I see the liars and fiends
    That only abuse power with greed
    I had hope, I believe
    But I'm beginning to think that I've been deceived
    You will pay for what you've done

    GO!! No more sorrow
    I've paid for your mistakes
    Your time is about up
    Your time has come to be replaced

    Face this, Hypocrite
    Face it, Hypocrite
    Face this, Hypocrite!!

    GO!! No more sorrow
    I've paid for your mistakes
    Your time is about up
    Your time has come to be replaced

    GO!! No more sorrow
    I've paid for your mistakes
    Your time is about up
    Your time has come to be replaced

    Your time has come to be replaced
    Your time has come to be washed away
    Your time has come to be erased
    Your time has come to be replaced

    Your time has come to be washed a way
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    Voulentines Dai
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    My insides turn to ash
    So slow.
    And blew away as I collasped
    So cold.
    A black wind blew away
    From sight.
    Another darkness over day
    That night.

    And the clouds above moved closer
    Looking so dissatisfied
    And the heartless wind kept blowing, blowing

    I use to be my own protection
    But not now.
    Cuz my path has lost direction
    Somehow

    A black wind took you away
    From sight.
    Another darkness over day
    That night

    And the clouds above moved closer
    Looking so dissatisfied
    And the ground below grew colder
    As the put you down inside
    And the heartless wind kept blowing, blowing

    So now you're gone
    And was wrong
    I never knew what it was like
    To be alone

    [Rap] My path is lost, just like the mixed directions I've walked in solitude while in the dark I went over my thoughts after you left without a good bye, and without a reason as to telling me why Now I just sit here, not feeling a thing. My heart is crushed just like a birds broken wing But one thing about todays pain is that it's eternally more. Looking out the window remembering all the days before when I wasn't at home and all alone
    `
    On a Valentines Day(x6)
    [in background]
    I just to be my own protection
    But not now
    Because my mind has lost direction
    Somehow
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    En Batwin
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    Stays the same just acustic guitar and chester sining "And I cannot" part
    --
    En Pi-siz
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    Telling me to go, but hands beg me to stay.
    Your lips say that you love, your eyes say that you hate.
    There's truth in your lies, doubt in your faith
    All you built you've laid to waste,
    There's truth in your lies, doubt in your faith
    All I've gots what you didn't take

    And I, I wont be the one.
    Be the one to leave this, In pieces
    And you, you will be alone, alone with all your secrets
    And regrets, Don't lie

    (Rap Verse)

    Lie about all the things you've had before
    When you kept telling me you've always loved me more
    And now in peices you will see, that every pain that you've made for me
    I will take it all away and set them free,
    Breaking the ache inside my heart that only wants to feed
    (It only wants to feed, it only wants to feed)

    You promised me the sky, tossed me like a stone
    You wrap me in your arms, and chill me to the bone
    There's truth in your lies, doubt in your faith
    All you built you've laid to waste,
    There's truth in your lies, doubt in your faith
    All I've gots what you didn't take

    And I, I wont be the one.
    Be the one to leave this, In pieces
    And you, you will be alone, alone with all your secrets
    And regrets, Don't lie

    Like all the things you tell yourself inside your head
    Trying to create excuses to make me feel like I'm dead
    But you are the only one that will be filled with dread
    Not going to let your childish ways inside my head
    Intead, I'm gonna embrace the mistake that you've did
    Because now I'm free of the lies that you've always said

    (Guitair solo)

    And I, I wont be the one.
    Be the one to leave this, In pieces
    And you, you will be alone, alone with all your secrets
    And regrets, Don't lie

    (the pain it only want to feed on me, it only wants to feed)

    And I, I wont be the one.
    Be the one to leave this, In pieces
    And you, you will be alone, alone with all your secrets
    And regrets, Don't lie

    (piano outro)
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    Lil things giv'ya awai
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    (Adds some scracthing, take away the background add eletric guitar,
    some hip piano beats, and violin)

    Water grey, leaks through the windows
    And fill up the stair
    Chilling rain
    As if an ocean, everywhere

    Don't want to reach for me now do you
    I don't mean a thing to you
    The little things give you away
    And no there will be no mistaking
    The levees are breaking

    All you've ever wanted
    Was someone to truly look up to you
    Now six feet under water, I do

    Hope decays
    Generations disappear
    Wash away, as a nation kept with fear

    Don't want to reach for me now do you
    I don't mean a thing to you
    The little things give you away

    All you've ever wanted
    Was something to hold on to
    Little things give you away

    All you've ever wanted
    -Was someone to truly hold on to
    Now six feet under ground now
    I do

    Little things give you away
    Little things give you away

    Ohhh oh.. ohhhh oh ohhhhhh oh ohhhh ohhhhh.

    All you've ever wanted was someone to truly look up to you
    Little things give you away (x5)

    The little things give you away
     
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    Your rewritten lyrics don't fit the rhythm of the song.
     
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    They fit the rhytm of the song inside my head. Sadly I d not know how to write out the rythms I imagine. I can only imagine them as I play no instruments. I know how its suppose to sound though :) Plus it is NOT a rewrite of the album. It's a REMIX concept and with remixes comes new intros, outros, bridges and things all together.
     
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    I understand the concept, it's just, take this line for example from Given Up.

    Original line:
    Feels like I'll never leave this place

    Your line:
    Feels that I've never control my fate

    The way the rhythm of that particular line goes, there are too many syllables to fit into the original pacing of the line. It's very awkward to sing/say to the song in my opinion.

    Not to mention there should be a lot of proofreading on lines as well.
     
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    Someone please pork out my eyes with a stapler
     
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    :mellow:
     
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    You've outdone yourself this time. :lol:
     
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    Hey but seriously, don't be TOO mean to the guy... E for Effort? :lol:
     
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    There is just something about the lyrics that isn't right. Maybe that What I've Done verse was ok. the new one...maybe
     
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    |31337 et owt? No! :lol: Someone get a cross.
     
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    Well, you do have to guts to post whatever comes to your mind. That's....impressive?
     
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    pretty much what dude said about the syllables before, and damn... i thought i was gonna be the only mean guy.. but damn... i dont even wanna anymore... lol
     
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    I mean, seriously. I could make something up on the spot that flows better than this. Try to fit to the rhythm. For example:

    Now, take that, and modify it. And just for the purposes of being creative, I'm going to throw in some stuff you may or may not recognize since it's a remix.

    No offense if I was offensive in anyway, I was just making some generic stuff up to make a point. You have to try to fit the words to the flow. Even if it is a remix, it doesn't change the time signature or the pacing of the song. The only thing is tempo, and that just (chop and) screws things up. :lol:

    Oh, and what good are the rhythms you imagine if we can't hear them? Do we just assume that your rhythms work and say, "Hey, good job?"
     
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    Makino wins post of the day "fa sho" :lol::lol:
     
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    How about this? I call it.

    Bleed my doubts

     
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    The chorus doesnt work on that 'Bleed my Doubts' remix. I think just the one further would do.

    imo,
     
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    no offense or nothing, but it's not really "remixing" if you're changing just a few portions of what is originally written by someone else. also, as discussed above, the syllable counts tend to be all over the place.
     
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    I'll try one:


    Given Up(Underground Pound Remix)

    Put me out of

    Put me out of

    Put me out of

    Put me out of

    Put me out of

    Put me out of

    ...aaaaaAAAAAaAAAAAHHH!!H!H!!!!!!!!!!! MY FUCKING MISERY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Put me, Put me, Put me, Put me

    Put me, Put me, Put me, Put me(x10)

    I've given up (Put me, Put me, Put me)
    I've given, given, given, given
    Given up (Put me, Put me, Put me)


    Put me out of my

    Put me out of my

    Put me out of my

    Put me out of my

    FUCKING(fucking)

    MISERY..ery...ery....ry........y.............y.......y....y
     
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