Love Letter to Years End.

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    The Emptiness Machine

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    Love Letter to Years End

    You were fun to live,
    in the short time it took to live you.
    You brought me a momentary burst of happiness.
    But the smile that just touched my lips
    has gone just as quickly.

    Like a lantern fading on the coldest of winter nights.
    I watch you dim from afar
    and I know it's not okay to linger on too long,
    though the cadence of your wisdom
    has done more to enlighten me
    than any other so called worldly texts.

    It seems as if this miniscule confrontation
    was always destined to inform me of a very important truth,
    yet, as we know such dreams of destiny
    are beneath my outlooks and world views.

    It's much more likely that I just enjoy
    how your months flow together like a poem,
    and how they seem to roam and frolic.
    Such is the power of this knowledge that I am impelled to leave you,
    like the dew on a mountaintop,
    and sounds after the rain drops
    and night stops and brings light to a brand new dawn.

    But remember this,
    like under the dawn of death
    and in the end of life, or a song,
    and like the miracle that tomorrow always comes
    I know that the memories live on.
     
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    There are some lines that don't flow well in this. Like the extra long ones in a normally short stanza. Overral its good.
     
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    Roses are red
    violets are blue
    dear 2011
    you got me sued :angry:

    lol I think yours was way better
     
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    The Emptiness Machine

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    Thanks Pidgeon and Sarah.

    I agree there is some unconventional lines that don't really flow, maybe I'll rewrite sometime between next year and this.

    I know that last years roses were a deep red
    and that its violets were an extraordinary type of blue
    but it doesn't subtract from the fact that Pidgeon still got sued.

    Sorry, forgive me.
     

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