Look At This Place

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    jaymez

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    First verse:
    Look at this place where I lay my head down at night
    Look at these shoes where my soles got the blues just right
    Look at these tears that I'm crying but not for you
    Look at today cuz tomorrows a bother oooh

    Chorus:
    And I'm down to my last nickel, haven't got a dime to spare
    I'm feeding off the needy, got my needle and I shouldn't care
    I'm taking it in tryin to feel what I really feel
    Losing my ways half the battle and I just deal yeah
    I just deal

    Second verse:
    Look at this place where I lay my head down at night
    Memories and dreams of the past that I try to fight
    Look at me hiding in shadows out of the sun
    Lookin for reasons to stay but then I just run

    Chorus

    1st verse repeat

    The End



    I wrote this song over 2 years ago which is now on my cd, Follow Me. I was going through a lot of stuff then. It's something I've written that I'll never give to anyone. This one's mine.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Hmmmm.....
    Pretty good, i found it a bit to repetative for a poem, but as a song and played with music, which it is, it may work well. So hard to say. But for someone who likes three days grace, i don't think i should be complaining about repetativeness in songs. :lol:
     
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    jaymez

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    this is definitely a song. It's the first one Iv'e ever written. It's actually a way cool song with the music.
     
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    El Muerto

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    it's cool

    i'd really like to hear it
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    I'm looking and I got to say it's good.
     
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    fallenangel

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    this is actually alright but i would be better to hear it as the song with the music.

    still, i like it!
     

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