Lies.

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    Muri

    Muri It never ends.

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    There are so much lies,
    in my life,
    that I don't know where to start.

    Well first I smile,
    but inside,
    I want to hate and scream.
    Although it seems,
    that my life's just fine,
    and I'll live trough this,

    Well that's a lie,
    which keeps growing,
    and what I can't get rid of.
    These feelings are hell,
    and so is my life,
    but why can't anyone see?

    I can't live on,
    I keep hurting the wrong people,
    and that's eating me inside...
    Can't go forth,
    can't go back,
    I'm stuck in here,
    wondering,
    how to tell you,
    that this was all a lie.

    Okay,ahem,well,first,I'm sorry that this sucks and I'm sorry that this is short and I'm sorry that I can't write but I was encouraged to post it so... :)

    *hides* :embarassed:
     
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    MeLiS_

    MeLiS_ Well-Known Member

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    :D :D finally..

    that'z nice, u know, i love it!! ^_^
    keep writing, n posting also!! :lol: :lol:
     
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    Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    c'mon, this is awesome!!!! i really really liked this one, i just loved it!
    this is really true, but you've find a way to let us know your "lies" lol in such a beautiful and powerful way. great job!!!
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    nice one....seems like you were a bit tense
    "free your mind", like Chris says it, lol
    it's cool. ^_^
     
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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    now this is utter garbage! there is no such thing as a bad poem. if it comes from you heart and from real emotions then it isn't crap! it's only crap if you don't truly feel for the poem yourself and it is you thats losing out.

    apart from that, the poem was good! you've demonsrated an emotion and thoughts that i am sure that many of us can identify with. don't sell yourself short! pratice makes perfect, they say!
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Dont be sorry it's a good poem.
     
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    ahamLP

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    If my memory is not too weak I remember I had said somewhat similar to you,lol yeah you are right,any poem which comes from your heart is never bad,never,and this poem I guess is one which has been written from the bottom of your heart(the poet's heart lol),believe me,I always wonder why people think they are not good or not talented,coz this is awesome,I want to see more of your work,please :D ,and for those who think they are bad and who under estimate themselves here is a thought that I wrote I know you wont like it lol:

    "Those who under estimate themselves should know that they are over estimating their estimating capability." :whistle:
     
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    fallenangel

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    yeah, i remember and it was people like you that gave me the confidence to write what i felt. :D and i am greatful for that. thanks!
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    If my memory is not too weak I remember I had said somewhat similar to you,lol yeah you are right,any poem which comes from your heart is never bad,never,and this poem I guess is one which has been written from the bottom of your heart(the poet's heart lol),believe me,I always wonder why people think they are not good or not talented,coz this is awesome,I want to see more of your work,please :D ,and for those who think they are bad and who under estimate themselves here is a thought that I wrote I know you wont like it lol:

    "Those who under estimate themselves should know that they are over estimating their estimating capability." :whistle: [/b][/quote]
    yer great stuff. dont be so pesemistic. LOL reading my poems i probly don't have much to say the but oh well LOL. Anyway it is good and i agree. if it is how you feel it will always be good. (and if all else fails your mum won't say it's bad)
     
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    Muri

    Muri It never ends.

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    Thank you all so much! ^_^
     

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