Lats Hope: tell me what y'all think!

(v1)
Grasping the reality I hold so dearly
though I know you wont
I just wish you could hear me
and it slips away


(chorus)
Looking for something real
looking in hope to heal
dont want to let go
I can feel it all held within
all I want is to live again


(v2)
I cant take the lashings from you
critisism thrown from the other side
Im here all alone again
and it slips away


(chorus)


(bridge)
Im stuck in the hell I call my own
I cant hide from the fear inside
no longer seeing what I want to find


(chorus)



Please tell me what you think, and if you dont like it, please tell me why so I can improve. Please, I want to hear all opinions, CRITISISM IS GOOD! :rawk:

 

Though I prefer free verse, you're a talented writer, it flowed nicely, and was very relevant

 

*SMILES*

Hehe, thank you!....... Tom. :rawk:

It flowwwwweeddddd nicley.... oh yeah.

 

Haha, I really really like it, and dude your awsome hahaha.

 

...im lovin it... *sings im lovin it*