Just my honest feelings about you

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    Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    Just my honest feelings about you

    I'd really like to be the author of your dreams.
    Lay on my wishes and you'll see how I miss
    that first and unforgettable kiss.
    Therefore, my spirit just sings and swings.

    I'd really like to drink from your lips that delightful wine.
    To fill my heart with that powerful stab
    and no longer feel like a defenseless stag.
    How would I like your heart to be mine!

    There's one thing I'd like to share with you tonight:
    beyond midnight, my love is growing.
    From the top of the trees, you can see it glowing.
    Its powerful splendor hides the last fading starlight.

    Perennial oaks said we must never encourage fear.
    Just follow the forbidden naive twilight
    and we'll get out from betrayal's cold sight.
    Just say you'll forever stay with me, it's everything I want to hear.

    When the skies turn gray,
    I'll trade victory just to own your happiness.
    And with your endless tenderness,
    our love will find its way.

    Exemption blinded me, you were so hard to find.
    Your essence now rests on the purple grass.
    And with our feelings carved on the clean light glass,
    you'll stay forever gold in my soul and mind.

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    I know this one's different as well, in fact, it was one of my first english poems. I'd like to hear what you think about it :lol:
     
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    Muri

    Muri It never ends.

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    Ahhhh,I love your poems! (w00t)
    Very very very very very (....) good. :)
     
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    MeLiS_

    MeLiS_ Well-Known Member

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    agreed.. :lol: just another nice one.. ^_^
     
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    fallenangel

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    sparkling diamond you've done it again!
    this was really good and passionate! very nice!

    keep it up :lol:
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Yer. I agree with all of them. Amazing work
     
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    ahamLP

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    you are a different poet,different from the rest here,cause I have found writing one type of poems(like on hate) is easy,but writing on hate and love is something which a true poet can write side by side,and I think you have it in you to be a complete poet, but doesnt look like its one of your first english poems though,feels like you have been writing from a long time,keep it up.
     
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    Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    thanks for the comments guys, you just encourage me to get better every day :lol: . thank you all, i really appreciate it!!!
     

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