Jay.

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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    This one's for you, Jay.

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    Jay.

    In a moment so pleasant I can’t recall the taste,
    I remember that reason, I remember that face,
    In that moment that day, I lost everything and got it all,
    In that moment, I fell, but she broke my fall.
    For a moment was all she needed to fix me,
    And that moment concluded sorrows for me,
    Forgetting this world, I bathed myself
    In the hue of her eyes, I was saved from hell.
    I didn’t wait for that moment to end,
    And it went on I felt, I didn’t have to pretend,
    For that moment I could feel warmth back in my heart,
    Like that moment was longer than a million yards.
    And she didn’t even have to tell me why,
    She just knew that I would be alright,
    And she knew she couldn’t see my past,
    Or my future, but for that moment I was calmed at last.

    And that moment was divine, that moment she saved me,
    And that person is just enough I need to change me,
    And the innocence of her words held so much love,
    She knew I needed her, that moment wasn’t enough.

    In that lowered gaze is a sense of wisdom,
    In humility it lowers like the setting sun,
    You can find a childhood still waiting to live,
    Yet find that maturity, and it’s willing to give.
    In that raw beauty, is a sparkling grace,
    You can’t see it; you can’t feel its pace,
    In that timid tender body, is a free willed soul,
    And for that moment she gifted to me this, her whole.


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    Thank you, Jay.
     
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    Christopher

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    That's really nice, but aren't the roses a little much?
     
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    Arhaz

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    it's for Jay. She loves roses.
     
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    Christopher

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    Oh right... sorry, I didn't get that.
     
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    Arhaz

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    it's k... :)
     
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    Beautiful. Thank you. <3
     
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    Arhaz

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    you're welcome Jay.
     
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    I thought it was very good :)
     
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    Arhaz

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    you know, i get very anxious to know what you'd comment. i think you are the best amateur poet i have ever read and your comment means a lot to me. thanks.
     
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    Seinfeld

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    Simply beautiful. :)
     
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    Arhaz

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    thank you!
     
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    esaul17

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    Thank you, you may also be my favourite amateur poet. I love how you seem to bend the English language to your will. Lines like "In a moment so pleasant I can’t recall the taste," defy the usual literal structure but still get across the point perfectly...something I have trouble doing, but you seem to be able to do with ease.

    Your compliment means a lot to me.
     
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    Arhaz

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    well, your compliment means a lot to me aswell. thanks bro.
     

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