I present to you four sets of lyrics (and a revised version of a song I posted recently) that my band's going to work on this winter. The lyrics will probably change for the songs. The lines in italics are screamed or sung by my friend Colin whereas the "normal" lines are screamed or sung by me. "An Untitled Requiem for the Stars and for the Streets" As I look Up toward The night sky I mistake Planes for stars I'll disintegrate now And I know That a wish Won't come true On this night Fuck it all I'll burn away tonight The stars are weeping tonight Heaven shall come crashing The streets are crying tonight Crimson tears drown us all The stars are sleeping tonight Blood-lined streets, blood-soaked dreams The streets are dying tonight Bleeding black, bleeding black Truth be told This letter Was postmarked To be sent Years ago I'll disintegrate now Inside I Made a wish To bring you Bring you back Fucking lies I'll burn away tonight The stars are weeping tonight Heaven shall come crashing The streets are crying tonight Crimson tears drown us all The stars are sleeping tonight Blood-lined streets, blood-soaked dreams The streets are dying tonight Bleeding black, bleeding black There's always someone hanging on Hanging on, hanging on And pulling me down to the ground To the ground, to the ground I'll fly now without your hand Out your hand, out your hand On these wings stolen from angels dead Angels dead, angels dead Slain and dead, they'll fall to the Earth To the earth, to the earth I'll disintegrate and burn away tonight Burn away, burn away... tonight ----- "A Dozen Roses Lay Withered and Dead" It never seemed so hard to break this silence Though your cheeks shine in the brightest light Holding the river of tears That you've held in for so long My roses lay at your feet Withered and dead I'll offer my condolences for your broken heart But you have to know mine's broken, too I can remember the first night I laid my eyes on you Now it seems so far away I can't believe it's over now I'm broken You're broken We're broken in pieces I can't believe it's over now I'm broken You're broken We're broken in pieces tonight Shattered in pieces And laying on the ground Next to the rose petals fallen all around It came crashing down all around my feet I'd give anything To have you here with me ----- "The Courtship of the Devil" Here I am walking alone No place here can feel like home Lost inside I'll always be No-one here can help me see All the lies that you've built up Let me know that you've spilt blood So I'll rip off your wings You're dead to me So I'll rip off your wings You're dead to me So I'll rip off your wings You're dead to me You came in, you took it all Left me with nothing at all Music pounds inside my brain Knowing you don't feel the same Long ago we fell apart You stepped on my beating heart So I'll rip off your wings You're dead to me So I'll rip off your wings You're dead to me So I'll rip off your wings You're fucking dead to me You lied to me, you led me on I should have known it all along You fucked me, that's all you need Now here I am, just fucking leave Your wings are mine You're no fucking angel Your wings are mine You're fucking dead to me ----- "I Watched You Bleed the Blackest Red" This black plague is gestating in my heart Awaiting its chance to burrow through my sternum And destroy everything that I've loved Because we've all got the mind of a murderer We've all got blood on our hands The escape is imminent I feel that my heart is breaking I feel that my lungs are bleeding Take my hand and lead me away from here Misfortune could strike you down at any moment I don't want to be here when that starts Because behind the theatre they're all waiting They know what's about to be Gunshots ring out I feel that my heart is breaking I feel that my lungs are bleeding Raise your head up to the sky Crimson drops rain down tonight I watched you bleed The blackest red We've all got blood on our hands They know what's about to be The escape is imminent And gunshots, they ring out now Oh, my God Have I done it again? This stain on my shirt is too red And I feel that my heart is breaking Oh, my God Have I done it again? This stain on my shirt is too red And I feel that my lungs are bleeding I watched you bleed The blackest red Oh, my God Have I done it again? This stain on my shirt is too red And I feel that my heart is breaking Oh, my God Have I done it again? This stain on my shirt is too red And I feel that my lungs are bleeding I watched you bleed The blackest red
I love all 4 of them man, I'd give the first one 9/10, the second one 7/10, the third one 7/10 and the fourth one 8/10
All four are beautiful. My favourites were 'The Courtship Of The Devil' and 'I Watched You Bleed The Blackest Red'. Just beautiful.
Didn't like any sorry. They all didn't seem to have any point, say anything or sound good. I really do not mean this in any way to offend you or your writing, really I don't. It just sounds like some pussy attempt at emotion, your half-assed use of curses didnt have me much impressed either. Why curse when you could write so much better than it? I mean, if you were trying to force the image of some wannabe suicidal kid cutting roses up and pouring ink into his eyes so he can cry black,awesome job.
That was out of line - sure you're entitled to your own opinion, but please don't call him a pussy, that's just rude. You're warned for being so inconsiderate, now apologize to Will.
Well, I didn't need you to warn him or even post, I was just pointing out that I didn't like how he reacted to my lyrics. He could've just told me they sucked instead of going off on a tangent about how I'm a pussy. But okay. Also, happy songs are for suckers.
HOLY SHIT. I'm going to write that song now. But then again we're also going to write a song about dudes that wear chick pants.
First off, i must say i did not call him a pussy. I said it sounded like a pussy attempt at emotion. Not a pussies attempt emotion. Second, Sure. Will, I am sorry that I 'called you a pussy' I am very sorry if it looked that way, it is in no way what I intended to say. I hope that we can leave this behind us and you won't judge me on this misunderstanding. Regards.
Dude, it's cool. I just felt like you were trying to attack me with your entire post instead of pointing out what you didn't like. I only mentioned it to Derek because I thought you were attacking me, but I didn't think he was going to warn you. But for the record, I apparently used to write better songs, since none of my new stuff is getting very many replies, whereas all my old stuff had 20 replies every time I posted something. And in my opinion, my older stuff was complete shit.
I think he meant "a half-assed attempt at writing emotional lyrics." But that could all be cured by Walter The Cotton Candy Puff and his musical adventures.
Per request of the affected user (Will) I am removing your warning. Please keep in mind that this isnt the usual way we do things. I know if someone called my work pussy like I wouldn't want to get the warning taken away, but its Will's wishes so..consider yourself blessed.
I doubt that... I think it's probably because you're not an admin or mod here anymore so people won't suck up through replies to your songs. Anyways, here's my opinion on them. "An Untitled Requiem for the Stars and for the Streets" I'm not too fond of the verses. To be honest, I think they're pretty weak. The chorus is pretty cool though. "A Dozen Roses Lay Withered and Dead" This one's really good. Probably the best one. "The Courtship of the Devil" This song's alright aswell. I think it's brought down by the repetition, and I should know 'cause I've fucked up songs by repeating stuff over and over . "I Watched You Bleed the Blackest Red" This one's also pretty good but could use a bit of work. I'm not too fond of the part that's repeated at the end. I'm glad that you haven't stuck with the same formula over and over again like a lot of people do. Overall it's pretty good work and note that a local band I know have written a song about a unicorn which started a band and got addicted to herion
Those are awesome. My favorite's An Untitled Requiem for the Stars and for the Streets. For some reason it reminds me of Story of the Year's Anthem of Our Dying Day. Great job!