I Wish I Knew

And when I see the star is falling
Every time I wish upon it
Every time I wish the same
To break these chains holding me
And now I know the past is gone
But I don’t know how to move on
I wish I knew
I wish I knew
I wish I knew

And when I take a look around
There’s only chaos to be found
The streets are wet, the sky is gray
It’s not gonna bring a brighter day
I know it’s messing with my head
But I don’t know how to forget
I wish I knew
I wish I knew
I wish I knew

 

Good! I personally think it could use with one more verse that would conclude it better, but other than that it's pretty good, keep it up.

 

yeah, i know. but i was too lazy to finish it.

 

yeah it's cool, keep going!!

 

i love the rhyme and the way you got off with the message simultaneously...it takes a lot of patience to bring it up...
a concluding stanza perhaps?

 

Keep it up.

 

i agree with david, one more verse and it would be perfect!

this is real good and i really enjoyed this one. well done!