I never knew Quite how to play. This game they call, Living a life. They say you trip, But you get up again. To regain your stance, To regain your position. Thought about how it was, The dream that i knew. The dream that turned out, To be true and all. Tripped and fell over, To the sinking of the atmosphere. Never again, to regain my feet, In this society, I stand alone.
The title is the same as a godsmack song, which for me makes it........ i don't know, it's just annoying when people use titles from songs...... but that's not your fault at all. It seems a bit short i thought, and definately not your best. It just didn't have the depth to it. I know you can do better, keep it up.
Ok, it's good, but the thing is..I agree with the fact that because it's a Godsmack titled song, its kinda..weird. Cause like, I think of Sully Erna singing it, then I think of the actual song. Hm, but maybe try renaming it?