I never thought I never thought I could have a sky. Shelter. Freedom. The sweetest guardian. This... I never thought I could feel tears of happiness. An honest body language. The touch of a truthful heart. An endless feeling. This... I never thought I could receive Tenderness. A caress. Hope. Trust. This... I never though I could feel like sharing a smile. My skin. A whole new paradise. Life itself. This... I never thought I could live inside a stare. A hug. A cloud. A kiss. This... I never though you would like me to own a delightful midnight. The secrets life has to give. The inner peace of an angel's soul The glory of a powerful blessing. Your love... ********* (Dedicated to Coshe - my inspiration for this poem) ********* I know this one isnt as "i want to kill myself" as my other ones, but i hope you guys like it and add your comments.
I love it very unique and positive; you're right when you say it's different from most of the others in this forum lol. I love the optimism from a person in it who sounds like they are experiencing some powerful emotions for the first time in a while and how you trail the word "this..."
Well do you what I liked in this,guess? lol it looks like a pistol to me,and as far as the poem is concerened its one of the most different I've read(cause I hardly see positive poems here),but this one is awesome,and about that pistol I guess,its like using the pistol,you can kill the negative thoughts in you(lol I just felt like that),but believe me if you can write both about positive and negative stuff you are a complete poet,sometimes I feel like its impossible for me to write about positive things after writing so much about negativity,but your poem is cool,keep it up.
i totally agree, good interpetation! it is very different and i love the last paragraph! keep up the good work!
hey good job. I like it. I'm not a big fan of the one word lines so that's what made me feel that this poem wasn't as good as your previous but i still liked it. PLUS it has inspired me to write a positive poem. So look out. my next poem should be positive.
i like the whole thing. the idea. the presentation was just good. simple. you can get some more work done on it, if you are really serious about it. otherwise, if you've done it as a part of your daily routine...it's lovely. just something that every one would want...good job!!!