Please, take your time and read this. Thoughts and Opinions are very welcome. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I killed the moment: I'm lost inside my deteriorative mind Again I'm confused by cryptic signs Trying to force words I've choked down again just to break the silence, even if I don't make sense I hate having but an hour left with you An hour left and I know just what I want to do But I'd hate to rush through just to give in to lust I'd hate to rush through eventhough I feel that I must I'm sorry, I killed the moment Now the hours up und your back home I hate the fact that I have to spend this night alone Somehow I know I regret not taking a chance A chance for love, tenderness...well, actually...a chance to get into your pants But I killed the moment
It was a cool piece. Like, my main complaints are just the actual direction of the piece, not how you presented it. I'm obviously the minority here though lol. I also liked your wording and such more than pretty much all of your other stuff. I even had to use a dictionary to be sure of "deteriorative" . I liked the opening two lines the most. Good job overall though man.
Yeah...this was actually just a piece to actually use the word deteriorative. The second line came to mind when I heard this song from P.O.D. and the rest just evolved around it...so...yeah And also: thank you