I killed the moment

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    Seinfeld

    Seinfeld We are the nobodies LPA Super Member

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    Please, take your time and read this.

    Thoughts and Opinions are very welcome.

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    I killed the moment:

    I'm lost inside my deteriorative mind
    Again I'm confused by cryptic signs
    Trying to force words I've choked down again
    just to break the silence, even if I don't make sense
    I hate having but an hour left with you
    An hour left and I know just what I want to do
    But I'd hate to rush through just to give in to lust
    I'd hate to rush through eventhough I feel that I must

    I'm sorry, I killed the moment

    Now the hours up und your back home
    I hate the fact that I have to spend this night alone
    Somehow I know I regret not taking a chance
    A chance for love, tenderness...well, actually...a chance to get into your pants

    But I killed the moment
     
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    Bryan

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    :lol:
     
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    Zakrisk

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    This is my favorite one that you've written.
     
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    Seinfeld

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    Thank you very much
     
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    Messy Marj

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    That made me grin a bit hehe ^_^
     
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    Agent

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    Haha that was cool bro!
     
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    Seinfeld

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    Yet again, thank you.
     
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    Gitsnik

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    Nice :)
     
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    esaul17

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    It was a cool piece. Like, my main complaints are just the actual direction of the piece, not how you presented it. I'm obviously the minority here though lol. I also liked your wording and such more than pretty much all of your other stuff. I even had to use a dictionary to be sure of "deteriorative" :).

    I liked the opening two lines the most. Good job overall though man.
     
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    Seinfeld

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    Yeah...this was actually just a piece to actually use the word deteriorative. :lol:

    The second line came to mind when I heard this song from P.O.D. and the rest just evolved around it...so...yeah :p

    And also: thank you ^_^
     

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