I am a free thinking dreamer.

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    army_skater101

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    i wonder why talks about peace yet give none.
    i hear voices from the deepest part of my soul
    i see the prince of lies himself in my eyes
    i want to be with her forever.
    i am a free thinking dreamer.

    i pretend to be someone else
    i feel those eho laugh at my soul
    i touch others with my wisdom
    i worry about those in my life
    i cry for those going to drugged filled heavens
    i am a free thinking dreamer

    i understand everyone's mind
    i say i care for all
    i dream about the human free skies
    i try to help and give to everyone
    i hope that i will be understood one day
    i am a free thinking dreamer.

    this was written by a dear friend of mine. i wanted to get some input on ot for him. :) please comment
     
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    Muri

    Muri It never ends.

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    Pretty nice. ^_^ But I'm sure she can improve. ;)
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    It's not bad.
     
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    fallenangel

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    i feel the "i am" at the start is unnessary but apart from that its good.
     

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