heres my newest song called hurtfull pride, some of the lines may be hard to understand because not everyone sees things the same as me, if you dont understand something just ask me Hurtful Pride Ive made a few mistakes A few things I wanna take back One hundred percent regret All those things I said just to make you upset And now I just wanna forget Now you’re leaving me here all alone Hearts turned to stone Covering up my scarred bone Deep down inside I wish I could hide And dry my eyes Which were once full of pride When I had you by my side You keep running away from me I see why you’re doing this to me Make me get down on my knees Corrode the pride that I once contained I gained so much/ then it got drained The tables have turned In my heart you have burned An image of someone concerned I see the image clearly Someone who loved me dearly But I hurt them severely Every mistake I made The image of a person I betrayed My answer was the silver blade I wish I could evade How I was conveyed So my answer I delayed/ so I could Change the way I was portrayed You keep running away from me I see why you’re doing this to me Make me get down on my knees Corrode the pride that I once contained I gained so much/then it got drained
It's a very good but change this line "One hundred percent regret" It just doesn't sound right to have One hundred percent in the lyrics unless it's rap.
thanks for your replies, and the thing is it is rock/rap, kind of thing, it is meant to be sung kinda like faint, as in its rap but not too quick, except the chorus is meant to be a quick rap. next time i put up a song i will write how its meant to sound
no, i don't hate rap. It's just I just don't like it. my point of view. I write lyrics which are rap/rock but I don't like to use stuff like that.