Him. (title sucky - undecided) :P

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    Muri

    Muri It never ends.

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    aaanyway. It's not good,but I'd like to spill it. :)

    I remember when,
    you talked to me,
    about everything there is to talk.
    Sometimes I'd even wish you'd stop.
    But now I only hope you start again...

    This silence between us,
    has lasted so long,
    which seems like an eternity,
    and I can't take it anymore.
    I miss you so much,
    I miss your voice...

    Why won't you tell me,
    what is wrong?
    Are you afraid,
    or is it me,who has to go?
    I'm in terrible pain,
    please speak to me,
    let me know,
    say something.
    Because with this I've learned one thing,
    that ignorance is hell.

    And hell hurts,burns and freezes,
    leaving me an empty shell,
    and nothing more than a girl who fell.
    But this lost love is a wound,
    which leaves a scar so deep and hurtful,
    a scar that'll never heal.
     
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    Luke

    Luke Mind Your Manners. LPA Addicted VIP

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    Notv bad,some more work would make this even better,good job :)
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

    lp_sk8ergurl Well-Known Member

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    Good work.
     
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    notneo

    notneo Well-Known Member

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    Hey its simple and nice . I actually understood it in one go (wonder that!!!) . Write some more .
     
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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    it started off alittle slow, i think but it got much better half way in. if it was worked on alittle, not too much, this would really kick ass!

    the rawness of the emotion your feeling come through. so in all, it was really good but with a little work, it could be great! :lol:
     

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