This poem is written in the form of a conversation which took place on a phone call, here (V.O) is Voice Over i.e., the voice on the other side.So here we go,leave your comments of what u felt about it. Phone Rings: Trin Trin Trin Trin A person lifts the phone and begins to talk Hello, who is this ? (V.O) Can I speak to you please Ya,but who the hell is talking (V.O) Keep it cool man I aint stalking But tell me who are you first (V.O) You want happiness and am here to quench your thirst What? are you OK or have you gone insane (V.O) I know you are sad and that you are in pain Well I guess you've got the wrong number (V.O) No its the right one, but I think you are in deep slumber What do you want from me and why are you bugging me (V.O) Stop thinking only about the 'I' and start thinking about the 'We' This is it,stop, or am gonna slam down the phone (V.O) I pity you man for you don't even know you are all alone (V.O) As you wish,its your life,anyway you wanna know who I am ? (V.O) Idiot, fool its God speaking to you, now damn tuuuaa tuuuaaa tuuuaaaaa (Phone cuts from the other side) What??!!!! Hello!! Hellooo!!!! Hellooooo!!!!!.............
Weird but good. quite original sort of formatt. i liked it. dont know about anyone else but even though i didnt think it was the best poem since there really wasnt any deep meaning i found it very interesting
man, u r fucking awesome! (sorry lol) since I first read your posts, I went insane. u really r fascinating . This was very original, I really liked it. u know? this reminds me of something: (if u r interested) many times we just lock ourselves inside a big bubble and we dont care for everything else happening around us. Life has many good & bad things, and I must say they both r really interesting if we put attention. Many times, we dont realize this and we just get to live a dull existance. Im not trying to sound interesting, but it is my point of view. U know what? i believe we're gonna get along very well If u enjoy reading, I strongly recomend this book: i read it in spanish, but i believe the title in english must be "the alquemist" by Paolo Coelho (an author from rio de janeiro i believe) well, this books talks about what i just wrote. From the posts I've read (your posts), i believe u'd find it interesting. Anyway, PLEASE keep on writing!!!!
Man watch out for this one. Could be a crazed fan. Just playin man. Personally didn't like the poem in whole, but I did like the end where it ended up being god. I also like the format, which is very creative. (Which is something I like to stress, if you've noticed.)
:angry: what the heck do u mean with that? I do like the poem and i recognize the fact that he is very talented, so dont come with that shit again, man u have no idea of what i mean. (not to be rude) but i didnt like the comment...
When you post on this forum you are allowing others to comment freely about your poem and post their own opinions about it. And yes... teh Edit button is your friend. Double posting is baaaad.
When you post on this forum you are allowing others to comment freely about your poem and post their own opinions about it. And yes... teh Edit button is your friend. Double posting is baaaad. [/b][/quote] What's that,I have written the poem and I have never ever stopped anybody from posting their opinions or comments so why are you blaming me?,I think there is some misunderstanding. :wth:
I wasn't coming with any shit. Notice the "just playin man". If your going to read something read it all, and give into sarcasm.
What's that,I have written the poem and I have never ever stopped anybody from posting their opinions or comments so why are you blaming me?,I think there is some misunderstanding. :wth: [/b][/quote] notice that I quoted 'the sparkling diamond' and not you. I wasn't speaking to you otherwise I would have said: "Hey...you there! Yes you, the write person...YOU'RE EVIL" but did I say that? No, no I did not.
C'mon .in.the.shadows., I was just a little bit stressed (got a bad day, sorry). dont take it personal (also speaking generally). Lets just get along in a good way, ok? please accept an apology if anyone got offended with my posts. c ya!