Goodnight I know you have it tough I know you think life's rough But I've had enough of this cure. You're gonna take another pill Take it all in Then you'll be dead Till half past ten Losing yourself too this hell Dont you known that your silently killing yourself I understand the pain I understand the need I understand the feelin' Of being mistreated I understand the guilt in your heart From everyone you sold out But you gotta hold out Cause noone can mend the hole But until you understand how too relieve the pain (Another way) Ill say goodnight Ill come back another day (Goodnight, Goodnight) Goodnight (Goodnight, Goodbye) Yeah, I know it sucks, but what do you think?
I don't really get the message, but its structure is good. I think it needs commas. BTW if the last one was verse it'd be good