Goodbye Sun

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    arT saveS

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    Extended version of Seven Years and Peace Treaties

    Slaves to a master that you created…
    Bowing to the ignorance of your own mind.
    Casting stones at you, the creator…
    As I kneel at your feet and spit before you.
    Blinded by the light that delivers…
    The destruction and chaos starts here.
    I declare war against the maker…
    And a defense against fear.
    The evil lies within…
    Burn down your cross, your symbol of lies.
    Scriptures and prophecies…
    Goodbye.

    Sinning and blasphemy,
    Destroying everything you ever created…
    In a dark and cold world…
    Stupidity reigns.
    Full of sacrilegious morons and followers of you…
    Forcing our fate of endless suffering in eternal flames.
    Existence is a lie, your life a dream…
    Pain is not real; death is the only reality,
    The only true act we can count on.

    In this perpetual train of thought,
    I am stuck in another world.
    Fear and chaos flourish in a fragile mind that is decaying…
    Rotting…
    Molding…
    Crumbling.
    I stumble upon the path of an ethereal reality,
    Gripping hands with terror…
    A feeling of apprehension.

    We plead for anything; it’s our only escape…
    All we ask is for a way out of the hellish realm we are contained in.
    To sedate the body and kill the pain,
    Numb the mind from this horrendous state.
    We cry out confessions of agony,
    Only to be brought down.
    Slavery is the reality of life, we all have masters.
    Peace is no longer an option.

    Smells like annihilation…
    Putrid war and death.
    Battle of the ages,
    Waging war against humanity.
    Hell has erupted and it’s overflowing…
    No way out.
    Impossible to run,
    Nowhere to hide,
    No longer alive.
    Goodbye.

    The sky hides in fear, as the clouds block the sun.
    The world cries as it drowns in the flood.
    The only way to survive is to feed on the blood,
    That has been shed from the Last Battle.
    Ignorance led us, but now corruption has taken our hands…
    We will die alone, with no one and nothing,
    But we will finally be set free.
     
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    oh. my. god.!!!

    this is so powerful! what the hell are you on when you write this stuff? (or should i not ask that! :shifty: )

    this is amazing and maybe one of the best poems i have ever seen from you. you have amazing talent and i hope it comes in good use to you in the furture.
     
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    arT saveS

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    Thank you very much fallen angel. :) I'm glad you like my poems, I don't think I've written any you have disliked...?

    Oh and I was sober when I wrote this poem. :chemist:
     
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    uh huh!

    since i have been reading your poems, don't think there has been anything i have disliked!

    keep at it! ;)
     
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    Keep up the good work.
     
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    Thank you. :)
     
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    dude...that is great! i really felt some intensity... ^_^
     
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    Thank you very much. :)
     
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    Intence stuff. I really like it, i'm glad you decided to extend on Seven Years and Peace Treaties and I like the new title better.

    I must say that i think this is one of my all time favourites from you, so powerful and deep with great imagery. I liked it because it portrays a future that seems so distant when it could be so close to where we are today.
    I love your style of writting, i wish i could write like that but i can't, oh well.
    Another AMAZING master piece of poetry, keep it up, sorry it took me so long to read it.
     
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    Thank you, David. I appreciate it. :)
     

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