Hope you like them. Not my best work but whatever. "Good Luck" Good luck, I know it won't be with me, I'm fucking lonely, And you're so pretty, Good luck, It wouldn't work in the end, It's just like, You were a good friend. Just a little kiss, Nothing else at all, To make you see, What I could be. Good luck, I know I've fallen faster before, But it's scary, When I've become a bore, Good luck, Make it seem not good enough, When it is, It's gonna be so good; I've got great plans. Just a little kiss, Nothing else at all, To make you see, What I could be. Goodbye, good luck, good riddance, Goodnight, goodmorning, goodbye again, Hello, what's wrong, why can't I help? Goodbye once more, you're not coming back. Just a little kiss, Nothing else at all, To make you see, What I could be. "One Last Fall" So you know, I told you everything I thought, And you know, all the feelings I've faught, Let's keep this all a secret, So I can't make a move. All this shit you've fed me, All these lies I can't use, Just answer when I call, I need this. One last fall. Just look at me, I want you to look into my eyes, And I want you, to tell me everything you don't like, So I can change some things, So I can make my move. All this shit you've fed me, All these lies I can't use, Just answer when I call, I need this. One last fall, So I can make a move.
i love the first one...very heartbreaking...i can relate to it...sort of... the second one is good too! keep up the good work Dedicated!
Great work Dave,I like the first one better because its got alot more emotion and I could definatly see this being a well listened to song
Wow, you are really talented. I agree with Hellflame, the first one is better. On a side note: The title on the home forum page reads "Good Luck and One Last F..." Guess what I thought?
they're good,but i think you should express your emotion with more complicated vocabulary than "shit,fuck" etc