Hi, I am going to post my original work here and I would like some people to give me some feedback.......These are all real feelings that I have/had in the last couple months. Please remeber when criticizing me that I'm still kinda young so......... I thought it was fate But now its too late What I thought was trust Must have been lust You know it caused pain And youre too vain You broke the thing that beats in my chest Its hard to believe our love was the best I used to think you were good enough to be my wife But now i realize i wasted a part of my life I guess its good, im immune to it all I know what its like to rise and suddenly fall It's too late It's all gone You're nothing but a twisted con The thought of you makes me sick And you used to be the one in a heartbeat I'd pick
Most of these are incomplete...... You know its all I wanted, Just a simple request, But now it's time for me, To get this off of my chest, You betrayed me, And now its all done, Nothing left of a friendship, No more fun, But did you care? I didn't think so, You used to be my friend, You used to be my bro, And now its all gone, You never cared, So I it and reminise, About the times we shared, When It's all over, I'll still be here When It's all over, Have no fear When It's all over, This feeling will be done When It's all over, There's nowhere left to run!
i dont think your allowed to just *bump old topics* hey look! a really old post by me up there :chemist:
I like the lyric you did above *points* That's genius WOW lol. But you need a little work that's all, I like the context of the whole thing, I'd give you a 6/10