Far From The Truth

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    Darcy

    Darcy LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    Yeah, I like constructive critisizm. So um...critisize me!

    Here it goes:

    We've got our world in our hands and we wear it with pride
    We wear our problems on our sleeves like they're a prize
    I only ask for anything rightfully mine
    But it gets harder, the questions get worse every time

    They said that all our stripes and stars
    Are nothing more than prison bars
    And I am not a patriot
    But I know someone's full of shit
    They said that all our fireworks
    Contradict what we're fighting for
    I may not lead a stable life
    But I know when I'm in a fight

    We forget the past when we've got nothing else to do
    And I forget a lot, but I won't forget about you
    Cause you pulled the alarm for what you thought was true
    And you tore down what was a lazy afternoon

    They said that all our stripes and stars
    Are nothing more than prison bars
    And we don't ask about their scars
    They shouldn't be concerned with ours
    They said that all our fears of death
    Were just created in our heads
    But my old friend, she's not around
    They said she's six feet underground

    So please just give me an answer
    I never asked for much
    And don't forget your disaster
    If you don't want to tell me what it was

    You'll have to find another way to shut me up
    Find another way to shut me up
     
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    The Outsider

    The Outsider Billy Corgan = God

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    nice piece of work:p
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    I love it. It flows well, and it has a meaning. :hugz: Great work.
     
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    Arhaz

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    :eek: it's fantastic! great job! ;)
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    i agree, it flows reallly well and the rhyming didn't feel forced. Good job, i really liked it.
     
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    Darcy

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    Thanks everyone :hugz:
     
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    heshboy

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    It makes me warm and fuzzy, but more warm :angry:
     
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    Darcy

    Darcy LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    Is that good or bad? :unsure:

    Well thanks for the comment, either way.
     
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    heshboy

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    That means it's great :)
    I knew you would get confused :D
     
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    NickelNine

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    Great stuff man! Flows perfectly!
     
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    Darcy

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    Thank you everyone, you're all so kind. ^_^
     

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