fallen rose

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    ~*Numb*~

    ~*Numb*~ Well-Known Member

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    i just wanted to know what you all thought of it... i hope i do this right.

    ~Like a glass rose fallen, frozen still
    Dust sits where beauty once fulfilled
    The shards, like time fly into the wind from pasts questions.
    The shards fall stone cold on the soft earth
    yet lay buried in the silence of the answer,
    Though now uncovered they can never be put back to the beauty that they once shined.


    forgive the small qoute that everyone should know... it just fit there... :whistle:
     
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    [Brkng Th H@bt]

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    It's okay...not really good though. Too small...and...I don't know. Just work on it a bit more.
     
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    Trish

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    No way! This is really good!
    A poem doesn't have to be long to be good! ^_^
     
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    ass_kicker

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    i love all your works, theyre great pieces of art. more, more!
     
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    Stina

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    :)
     
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    Mr. Benzedrine

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    To be honest i prefer short poems, That awesome keep up the great work ^_^
     
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    ~*Numb*~

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    thank you all! i know it is short but i wrote it along time ago... it was for a school "project" and i'm sorta planning on writting more i just haven't figured out anything good yet to match the lingo... ^_^'
     
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    Branden

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    I like it, it is very short, but sometimes that can be good. Good Job, I give it an 8/10.
     
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    linktolinkinpark

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    I always think, the shorter, the more descriptive! If you think about it, it's mostly true! I love it, and this is very odd b/c last night, I was writing about a glass ring, and I only read this today!
     

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