Failed.

It's about me exaturating my feelings about wanting a mom that most people take for granted and how she failed in raising us. (Me and my brothers).

Intro: *instrumental*

Verse 1:
My wounds still bleeding,
a thick blanket covering them cold.
No light coming through can help me now,
my emotions escaping, growing cold.

Pre-Chorus:
Fail or succeed I'll never know,
unless I try on my own.
Free from my little corner,
exploring a world that's unknown.

Chorus:
And I feel,
that nothing can go wrong, if I have you.
And I see,
No one can help me now, when I'm so wrong.
And I know,
that I can never do this right, missing that feeling,
Of being with you.

Verse 2:
All of my pain comes from you,
but I'll only smile if you do.
Feeling so violated, I just wish you would stop and look,
at this monster you've become.

Pre-Chorus:
Fail or succeed I'll never know,
unless I try on my own.
Free from my little corner,
exploring a world that's unknown.

Chorus:
And I feel,
that nothing can go wrong, if I have you.
And I see,
No one can help me now, when I'm so wrong.
And I know,
that I can never do this right, missing that feeling.

Bridge:
I never had a chance,
you just kept shunning me away.
Beating me with your peircing words,
I'll never forget how much I wanted you, and how I dread you now.

Chorus:
And I feel,
that nothing can go wrong, if I have you.
And I see,
No one can help me now, when I'm so wrong.
And I know,
that I can never do this right, missing that feeling.

Outro:
Without you,
I'm nothing I just want a fucking home.*fades*

R&R, hope you like it!

 

I really liked it, i like the power and the first chorus. Keep it up , waiting for the next one..

 

this is really good! but somehow, this bit feels familiar...

have you writen something like this before?

 

Hey, great song, i'd love to hear sung to the tune you hear it too music. at has a nice flow and great theme and you picked a great topic.

And fallen angel i don't know if your talking about one of my old poems, cause this bit reminded me of it also (if i'm thinking what you're thinking.

Could be totally rong lol but at least i get to advertise my poems

 

I liked the chorus.

 

yeah, maybe thats it!

 

Sounds like a mix of something by Evanescence and "One" by Metallica.

Nice, though.

 

Nice, Pygu, lmao. I know, your tunes are always really good, I mean, you're the one that found most of the tunes for my songs ... Keep it up!
More?

 

Thanks everyone

Fallenangel, this is the first song I've written!
HybridMinoda, I take that as a compliment
Mali, I don't plan on writing more songs any time soon, I was just mad at my mom so I wrote this. *hides in corner and waits for the evil flapjack queen to attack me*

 

-attacks- ahh, the much-awaited response . The evil flapjack (slash muffin) queen attacks. You'd better write another one, or ... I'll ... do something .... bad.

 

I like it.... nice lyrics.... really meaningful

 

hey, thats pretty good.. i like it too..

 

wow its pretty gd , keep up the good work , i shall wait for the next one and hopfuly enjoy tht 1 aswell as the 1st