Evil and I

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    Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    Evil and I

    For you, "pleasure" still means to hurt me.
    And I don't pretend to know why,
    for that's a curse I just don't own anymore.
    That name no longer belongs to me.

    I left that broken place where innocence was embarrassing.
    I rejected that world where my caresses made them bleed.
    I got rid of that shameless stabs in the back.
    I destroyed that awful desire for others' pain.

    I once was your best friend, but now I just can't stand you.
    I wanted the screaming voices to go away from my eyes.
    Therefore, you like to see me sweat and enjoy by tasting my insecurity.
    Now you want to hear my desperation for lines, because you know that's my way out.

    Do you like this tension color in my lips?
    Don't you think they match these tears?
    This hateful melody that never rests
    makes me drown inside my fears.

    Nevertheless, victory hasn't your initials.
    There's no way you can win this battle,
    for now I own something more powerful than your crown of nightmares.
    I've got him; we are two bodies sharing the same soul now, and together we will defeat you.


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    I'd appreciate any comments
     
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    ahamLP

    ahamLP Well-Known Member

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    Honestly the more I read your poems,the more I am feeling that I know very less about you,your poems intrigue me,very interesting to see such kind of stuff,and I have to say this that though you have written poems about love and poistive stuff like that,I feel that your real talent comes out whan you write poems like these,I dunno I just felt like that,so dont bind yourself into anything,that I have to write on this and only that,write what comes to your mind or as I say what your mind vomits out,this poem is truly a masterpeice,some lines made me feel that you have been writing poems since like 30 or 40 years,well though my feedback may not be as big as yours,but I have told what I wanted,so thats it,and please dont ever think of not writing negative poems,cause if you stop your thoughts just cause somebody has told writing neagtive stuff is bad,believe me you will think more negative than anybody else,cause this is a vent for your thoughts,and supressing any of them will not stop you from thinking negative,so just let it out,dont keep anything inside.keep writing.
     
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    bleeding rose

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    Hey i thought it was pretty darn good.
    Can't wait for the next one ;)
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    I got to agree.
     
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    Glue

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    I got to agree. [/b][/quote]
    me too :D
     

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