This is one of the best lyrics I've ever written. "Earthquake" I'm all alone Thinking about something Something I don't know I see you coming My heart stops I'm watching my feelings grow You come closer I can see the details of your beautiful face Your presence is getting stronger You're here Saying you love me your lips kiss mine I'm awake I never felt so fine I'm here for the life with you I still can't believe this is true This love will never die I feel it's getting stronger while days pass by But something's wrong Everything is shivering I can hold your hand but I can barely hear your voice You're trying to tell me it was your choice So I let you fall And I feel like my heart is bleeding (you're far away from me) I don't like this new feeling (please come back to me) But you're dead And I still have you in my head What do u think of this?
I like it, I would call it a poem though not a song. Simply because it has no chorus or direct verses.
I suck at intergender relationships. Let's not talk about it though. Can't really connect with the meaning but the poem wasn't too bad. The more you write the better you get. (7 half/10). Oh, and this is mostly from a rhyme and rhythm point of auth. . view.