Dustraisers (Choke On A Pretzel)

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    Will

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    ’’Dustraisers (Choke On A Pretzel)’’

    Assault rifle fire echoes in the alley
    While tank shells explode in a rage in the valley
    Another one lays at a soldier’s feet again
    A supposed enemy that we can’t defend
    And after they take their refuge inside the mosques
    They have to try to slip in as sly as a fox
    ‘Cause the commander in chief deemed it a just cause
    Because he’s too stupid to admit his own flaws

    How can they say
    That everything is okay
    When they’re the ones who raised the dust
    That we’re all choking on
    They can’t find truth
    So what the hell is the use
    When they’re the ones who broke our trust
    And now we can’t move on

    So apparently the mission was accomplished
    Yet the enemy seems to remain unvanquished
    The man representing our entire country
    Is still rampaging on a massive killing spree
    He won’t admit that the entire war is wrong
    That we’re inside a country that we don’t belong
    He’s just using his weapons of mass deception
    By hiding the devil inside his reflection

    How can they say
    That everything is okay
    When they’re the ones who raised the dust
    That we’re all choking on
    They can’t find truth
    So what the hell is the use
    When they’re the ones who broke our trust
    And now we can’t move on

    How can they say
    That everything is okay
    When they’re the ones who raised the dust
    That we’re all choking on
    They can’t find truth
    So what the hell is the use
    When they’re the ones who broke our trust
    And now we can’t move on

    We can’t move on
     
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    (w00t) Excellent! 9.5/10

    Very well done will I like that alot
     
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    Messy Marj

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    Very good job Will :thumbsup:
     
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    That's one of the best songs I've read in here. Great use of vocabulary and an overall greatly presented theme. 10/10. Awesome.
     
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    Really tight and awsome 10/10
     
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    Will

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    A little late, but thanks for the comments.
     

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