Well I have changed bits and added bits. Heres My Version: Dont stay Forget our memories Forget our possibilitys Take off that pain that stands with you Just give me my sole back And dont stay Forget our memories Forget our possibilitys Stand back and take alook at you Just give me my sole back And dont stay Sometimes I Feel like im watching over you Some how I cant feel like staying with you Sometimes I feel like your watching back at me Some how I Need you to go Dont stay Forget our memories Forget our possibilitys You think your changing me into Just give me my sole back And dont stay Forget our memories Forget our possibilitys Take off the pain that stands with you Just give me my sole back And dont stay. Your mind is focused on one thing You look like your go--ing to sing I take you back to the place you go But you insist, and I say no Your struggling to surface within I look at you and you start to spin Dont Stay Forget our memories Forget our possibilitys Take off that pain that stands with you Just give me my sole back And dont stay......dont stay...... DONT STAY. It is my first ever try at making lyrics, and I havent added much.
Not to sound rude, but I think the original is better. Try making your own song rather than taking another and changing it. I think that might help. *Shrugs*
yes...thats a great idea...bash thier first try.... umm, i would say that you should try and write you own lyrics rather than add onto someone elses. That why you can make it however you want, rather than trying to change an emotion or feeling someone has already written about for themselves.
Thanks for your opinons, that was my first ever try and im rubbish at english and I though that it would be a bit easier to edit one. Well i'll go and make one of my own.
Damn, guys! You should be American Idol judges! I was hoping Linkin Park songs would stray from the whole "pain" theme, but it was a nice attempt.
Since we've already heard from Paula and Simon, I'll be Randy Jackson Yo dawg, what's up? B) That's cool. To be honest..it just didn't cut it for me dawg, fo' real. I wasn't feeling it down here yo, it just didn't have that LP vibe you know what I'm sayin? You did your thing on stage, but I don't know, I was just fallin asleep here dawg, I didn't feel that energy, I mean you gotta step it up brotha, cause I just wasn't blown away by your performance this time around, you know what I'm sayin dawg?
i rekkon that is very gd.i sang it to dont stay and it went well.just tighten up some of it and it would ROK
I'm getting annoyed with your unintelligent spellings for words and I know for a fact you've been approached about this before. 'Rekkon', 'gd', 'sang' (you mean sung) and 'ROK' are not real words. It's because of people like you that I'm hoping to find a spellchecker plugin for these forums. It doesn't take more then 2 minutes to look over your post and make sure everything is spelled correctly. It's hard on people like me who cannot tell that "gd" means good, to have to spend more time than needed, deciphering your messages in order to write an adequate reply to them. Have some respect and start looking over your messages rather then posting error-filled posts that could only be described as bordeline gibberish.
You did pretty well at describing how you lost your beloved shoe there[/b][/quote] Hahaha. Well.. lol Cal.. for one, try writing your own stuff. I bet it'll come out better trust me.
"worse" than the original? I love the original Anyways, I think it needs more work and some spelling checks. Some lines don't seem to have enough syllables.
It pisses me off that someone who probably took 5 mins to rewrite a song got 14 replyes and people who spend weeks to write something get like 2 replys. Anyway, I didn't like your song
I hate that, too. [/b][/quote] wow, i am actually about to completely agree with Will, right you are guys! this sux, any one know any forums where they actually reply to tell ya what sux and whats great....any good place like this, just with people who reply with constructive critisizum? not the LPU boards, no one replys to me there, since i am a newb who hardly ever posts, and its not becuase my stuff is bad, becuase i look at topic views, and see like 2 people have looked at it!
i didn't think the song was all that good. And sure, it'd be gd (good ) to write ur own songs, but its fun to add to or change other songs.and about the spelling crap, it wouldn't be such a problem if u understood web talk. And it seems many of you can understand alot of it. so, here, lets see who can desiphure this message; omg, tht ws so fckn fny, i ws rotf lmfao!!!! Who got this? : (omg=)oh my god (tht) that (ws) was (so) so (fckn) fu***** (fny) funny (I) I (ws) was (rotf) rolling on the floor (lmfao) laughing my fu****** a** off not that hard huh?