Dont Stay My Version

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    limited_edition

    limited_edition Well-Known Member

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    Well I have changed bits and added bits.

    Heres My Version:

    Dont stay
    Forget our memories
    Forget our possibilitys
    Take off that pain that stands with you
    Just give me my sole back
    And dont stay
    Forget our memories
    Forget our possibilitys
    Stand back and take alook at you
    Just give me my sole back
    And dont stay

    Sometimes I
    Feel like im watching over you
    Some how I cant feel like staying with you
    Sometimes I feel like your watching back at me
    Some how I
    Need you to go

    Dont stay
    Forget our memories
    Forget our possibilitys
    You think your changing me into
    Just give me my sole back
    And dont stay
    Forget our memories
    Forget our possibilitys
    Take off the pain that stands with you
    Just give me my sole back
    And dont stay.

    Your mind is focused on one thing
    You look like your go--ing to sing
    I take you back to the place you go
    But you insist, and I say no

    Your struggling to surface within
    I look at you and you start to spin

    Dont Stay
    Forget our memories
    Forget our possibilitys
    Take off that pain that stands with you
    Just give me my sole back
    And dont stay......dont stay...... DONT STAY.

    It is my first ever try at making lyrics, and I havent added much.
     
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    Will

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    That was worse than the original. :mellow:
     
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    LornVourkolakas

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    Not to sound rude, but I think the original is better.

    Try making your own song rather than taking another and changing it.

    I think that might help. *Shrugs*
     
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    BroknSolace

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    yes...thats a great idea...bash thier first try....
    umm, i would say that you should try and write you own lyrics rather than add onto someone elses. That why you can make it however you want, rather than trying to change an emotion or feeling someone has already written about for themselves.
     
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    limited_edition

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    Thanks for your opinons, that was my first ever try and im rubbish at english and I though that it would be a bit easier to edit one. Well i'll go and make one of my own.
     
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    Ander

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    I didn't think Don't Stay could get worse.
     
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    Mark

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    Damn, guys! You should be American Idol judges! :lol:

    I was hoping Linkin Park songs would stray from the whole "pain" theme, but it was a nice attempt.
     
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    Derek

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    Since we've already heard from Paula and Simon, I'll be Randy Jackson

    Yo dawg, what's up? B) That's cool. To be honest..it just didn't cut it for me dawg, fo' real. I wasn't feeling it down here yo, it just didn't have that LP vibe you know what I'm sayin? You did your thing on stage, but I don't know, I was just fallin asleep here dawg, I didn't feel that energy, I mean you gotta step it up brotha, cause I just wasn't blown away by your performance this time around, you know what I'm sayin dawg?
     
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    saunderitos

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    i rekkon that is very gd.i sang it to dont stay and it went well.just tighten up some of it and it would ROK
     
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    Derek

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    I'm getting annoyed with your unintelligent spellings for words and I know for a fact you've been approached about this before. 'Rekkon', 'gd', 'sang' (you mean sung) and 'ROK' are not real words. It's because of people like you that I'm hoping to find a spellchecker plugin for these forums. It doesn't take more then 2 minutes to look over your post and make sure everything is spelled correctly. It's hard on people like me who cannot tell that "gd" means good, to have to spend more time than needed, deciphering your messages in order to write an adequate reply to them. Have some respect and start looking over your messages rather then posting error-filled posts that could only be described as bordeline gibberish.
     
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    saunderitos

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    okay,ill try
     
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    Cal

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    You did pretty well at describing how you lost your beloved shoe there
     
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    You did pretty well at describing how you lost your beloved shoe there[/b][/quote]
    :lol: Hahaha.


    Well.. lol Cal.. for one, try writing your own stuff. I bet it'll come out better trust me.
     
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    Omar

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    "worse" than the original? I love the original :lol:

    Anyways, I think it needs more work and some spelling checks. Some lines don't seem to have enough syllables.
     
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    Adam

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    Its ok I think ^_^
     
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    Omar A

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    It pisses me off that someone who probably took 5 mins to rewrite a song got 14 replyes and people who spend weeks to write something get like 2 replys.

    Anyway, I didn't like your song :)
     
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    Will

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    I hate that, too.
     
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    I hate that, too. [/b][/quote]
    wow, i am actually about to completely agree with Will, right you are guys! this sux, any one know any forums where they actually reply to tell ya what sux and whats great....any good place like this, just with people who reply with constructive critisizum? not the LPU boards, no one replys to me there, since i am a newb who hardly ever posts, and its not becuase my stuff is bad, becuase i look at topic views, and see like 2 people have looked at it!
     
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    linktolinkinpark

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    i didn't think the song was all that good. And sure, it'd be gd (good :p ) to write ur own songs, but its fun to add to or change other songs.and about the spelling crap, it wouldn't be such a problem if u understood web talk. And it seems many of you can understand alot of it. so, here, lets see who can desiphure this message; omg, tht ws so fckn fny, i ws rotf lmfao!!!!




















    Who got this? : (omg=)oh my god (tht) that (ws) was (so) so (fckn) fu***** (fny) funny (I) I (ws) was (rotf) rolling on the floor (lmfao) laughing my fu****** a** off

    not that hard huh?
     
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    Kæton

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