Dedicated / High Voltage

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    minuteforce

    minuteforce Danny's not here, Mrs. Torrance. LPA Team

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    This idea of mine sort of blends the two songs together. Enjoy:

    <HIGH VOLTAGE REMIX INTRO>
    <DEDICATED BACKING>

    (Hybrid)
    I have a dream of a scene between the green hills
    Clouds pull away and the sunlight's revealed
    People don't talk about keepin' it real
    (It's understood that they actually will)
    <SCRATCHES> Invented the mic so I could start blessing it
    Chin checkin' kids to make my point like an impressionist
    Many men have tried to shake us
    But I twist mic cords through double helixes and show them what I'm made of
    I buckle knees like leg braces
    Cast a spell of instrumentalness on all of you emcees who hate us
    (So you can try on) we'll leave you without a shoulder to cry on
    From now to infinity, let icons be bygones
    Meanwhile, I just grip my mic
    And hope me and my team make it through alright
    Because say what you will, and say what you might
    But don't ignore who it's for at the end of the night
    (Because)

    (This is dedicated to) <SCRATCHES>
    High voltage (The unforgettable sound)
    High voltage (bringin' you up and takin' you down)
    High voltage (coming at you from every side)
    High voltage (makin' the rhythm and rhyme collide)
    What's real (is the kids who know there's something wrong)
    What's real (is the kids who think they don't belong)
    What's real (is the kids who have nowhere to run)
    (Who are hiding in the shadows, waiting for the sun)

    <HIGH VOLTAGE BACKING>

    (Akira)
    I put a kink in the backbones of clones with microphones
    Never satisfy my rhyme, Jones
    Spraying bright day over what you might say
    My blood type's Krylon, Technicolour, Type A
    On highways, write with road rage
    Pages of wind in cages of tin, that bounce all around
    (Surround sound) devouring the scene
    Subliminal gangrene paintings, over all the same thing
    Sing song, karaoke copy bullsh*t
    Break bones verbally with sticks and stone tactics
    Fourth dimension, combat convention
    Write rhymes at ease while the track stands at attention
    Meant to put you away, with the pencil pistol official
    Sixteen line, the rhyme missile
    While you risk your all, I pick out all your flaws
    Spittin' rah, blah, blah, blah, you can say you saw
    (Because)

    (This is dedicated to) <SCRATCHES>
    High voltage (The unforgettable sound)
    High voltage (bringin' you up and takin' you down)
    High voltage (coming at you from every side)
    High voltage (makin' the rhythm and rhyme collide)
    What's real (is the kids who know there's something wrong)
    What's real (is the kids who think they don't belong)
    What's real (is the kids who have nowhere to run)
    (Who are hiding in the shadows, waiting for the sun)

    (Pulling me close, the shadow is warm inside)
    (This is where I feel at home, this is my place to hide)
    (Sometimes, sometimes, sometimes) <HIGH VOLTAGE>
    (Pulling me close, the shadow is warm inside)
    (This is where I feel at home, this is my place to hide)

    (Sometimes I feel like a prophet, misunderstood)
    (Under the gun, like a new disease)
    (Sometimes I feel like a prophet, misunderstood)
    (Under the gun, like a new disease)

    (This is dedicated to) <SCRATCHES>
    High voltage (The unforgettable sound)
    High voltage (bringin' you up and takin' you down)
    High voltage (coming at you from every side)
    High voltage (makin' the rhythm and rhyme collide)
    What's real (is the kids who know there's something wrong)
    What's real (is the kids who think they don't belong)
    What's real (is the kids who have nowhere to run)
    (Who are hiding in the shadows, waiting for the sun)

    High voltage (The unforgettable sound)
    High voltage (bringin' you up and takin' you down)
    High voltage (coming at you from every side)
    High voltage (makin' the rhythm and rhyme collide)
    What's real (everybody who doesn't feel safe)
    What's real (everybody who knows they're out of place)
    What's real (everybody with nowhere to run)
    (Who hide from the shadows, waiting for the sun)

    <DEDICATED BACKING AND CODA>

    High voltage

    (Sometimes)
     
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    Luke

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    Not bad but the start of the chorus could do with a little improvement.6.5/10
     
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    Unforgiver

    Unforgiver jogo bonito.

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    I just didn't like the chorus, but awesome job man :) 8.5 or 9/10
     
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    minuteforce

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    I don't see what wrong with it ... :innocent:
     
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    The Doctor

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    Because you wrote it. Learn to handle constructive criticism.


    I personally don't like it. All you did was take lyrics from 2 songs and put them together. Nothing new, nothing special. I could do the same thing in about 20 seconds.
     
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    Vampire

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    Because you wrote it. Learn to handle constructive criticism. [/b][/quote]
    This is coming from someone who attacked another member because they caught Will having lyrics from other songs in his piece.

    To the topic-starter, sorry, I hated this. You didn't do anything.
     
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    x3r09

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    eh... :mellow:
     
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    Andrea

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    This is coming from someone who attacked another member because they caught Will having lyrics from other songs in his piece. [/b][/quote]
    What the hell. Nate didn't "attack" anyone. He stated how Will did absolutely nothing wrong in his topic. Who cares if Will had similar lyrics in his song? I suggest you re-read what Will posted in his topic and get your damn facts straight before you say anything. You haven't been here long enough to know anything about Will and his history of writing nor any one of us.
     

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