Dear Sweetie

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by SuperXero, Dec 26, 2005.

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    SuperXero

    SuperXero Well-Known Member

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    Dear sweetie,
    so here i am again
    right back where i started
    alone and broken again
    only eyes of an angel can see
    how much you've always meant to me
    how many times will i have to say "im sorry"
    before it loses its meaning...
    YOU DONT UNDERSTAND!

    im jelous
    im broken
    IM EVERYTHING YOU'VE EVER WANTED
    im sad
    im mad
    IM EVERYTHING YOU'VE EVER HAD!
    im on my knees..-
    COUNTING BACKWARDS FROM THREE
    and im begging you to..
    come back to me..
    COME BACK TO ME!

    Dear sweetie,
    are you home alone tonight?
    do you need me here?
    to hold you tight?
    dont be scared
    i'll be here for you
    all day and night
    this is the part
    where i wake up
    and realize everything
    was all a dream..
    IM ALL ALONE AGAIN!

    im right
    im wrong
    IM THE OPPOSITE OF LOVE
    im bleeding
    im dying
    YOUR THE ONLY REASON..-
    im crying
    YOUR EVERYTHING TO ME
    YOUR THE ONLY REASON I BREATH
    im on my knees..-
    COUNTING BACKWARDS FROM THREE
    and im begging you to..
    come back to me..
    COME BACK TO ME!
    [With "IM SORRY" repeating in the backround until fade out]
     
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    esaul17

    esaul17 antichrist

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    This has really been over-looked. I think you shoudl work on the grammer and such of the piece, but other than that it was great. A few lines seemed a little, amaturish, but everyone learns with experience.
     

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