Crimson (original lyrics by Josh Asa)

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    Abel

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    OK, so not only am I an artist, but also an aspiring musician/songwriter. I've been songwriting since I was 14, but looking back all my rough drafts have been too easy and simple and cringe-worthy even XD but I continue to do it in hopes of becoming an elite songwriter. I've been greatly improving, so I wanted to post my recent songwrite up here so I can get some comments (compliments are nice, and constructive criticism is greatly encouraged by me). I'm planning on making an EP later on in my life once I get some more instruments and a band, but I already know what a song would sound like when I write it, so that's why I have so many drafts. If I do make that EP, no doubt "Crimson" will be on it.

    So "Crimson" may have simple lyrics, but that's because I chose a simple theme. Check it out and let me know what you think of it guys :D please and thank you!

    Crimson

    [Verse I]
    I'm eating dust on the floor
    Just sitting by your door
    Clutching the heart you tore
    Close to my eyes
    Too weak and stunned to stand
    With paleness crawling in my head
    I can't believe we just deband
    Like fire with ice
    I hope they treat you right
    I hope they are as kind
    But with my love so tight
    I'm broken that you kept me behind

    [Chorus]
    Why am I feeling so low
    When you are feeling so high
    Why am I in the dark
    So you can be in the light
    I'm down with Crimson blood
    Ever since you followed the one
    I'm Crimson red and it can't be outdone

    [Verse II]
    Just like sludge upon the floor
    I fall down a couple more
    I still have a reason to fall for
    I'm still falling for you
    But this is a lie (am I in a dream)
    As you push me aside (for the one next to me)
    You went off behind (and as I fall)
    And left me to die (ohh)

    [Chorus]
    Why am I feeling so low
    When you are feeling so high
    Why am I in the dark
    So you can be in the light
    I'm down with Crimson blood
    Ever since you followed the one
    I'm Crimson red and it can't be outdone

    [Chorus (with either a choir/full band w/o lead singers)]
    Why am I feeling so low
    When you are feeling so high
    Why am I in the dark
    So you can be in the light
    I'm down with Crimson blood

    [Chorus (full band)]
    Why am I feeling so low
    When you are feeling so high
    Why am I in the dark
    So you can be in the light
    I'm down with Crimson blood
    Ever since you followed the one
    I'm Crimson red and it can't be outdone

    [Outro]
    Ooh, oh, mmm
    Ever since you followed the one
    I'm Crimson red and it can't be outdone
     

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