Creative Writing Session 1

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    minusxerø

    minusxerø Overflow Supremacy LPA Addicted VIP

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    I wrote this to get something out, and not do something stupid... like die. It was typing for the sake of emotional release, and the backspace was indeed not used (hence why some of the sentences really aren't sentences, don't make sense, or are both). Read and review.

    It will never be seen. The teething that comes about in strides of tremulant crimson. Thousands of iterations of the biting and ripping and soon the animal will be revealed. Less than a whole, that is the feeling of that word that is questioned. Crimson drips from the animal, and with a flash of light forever given into memory. Frozen in the dark heat of the rays, right where it belongs. A dream, one of extreme emotion that circles around in a menacing threat that weaves elaborate scenes of contentment. Reach for it, do not give into the emptiness that rips forward with little regard for the heart. Beating, the organ pulses with new life, fueled by the minor expectation that will never be fulfilled. Undefined, the roar in the ears experiences a sudden shift, and the tone alters in such a way that sadness into anger, into uninformed joy. A brush strokes into white canvas and paints an image of a person, faded away through black. No eyes, for one cannot see what one cannot feel. When the eyes open, he hopes to see in them compassion, for the beating heart of crimson. Hoping that the suffering of the mind will end. Erratic movements and personality turn away in fear of rejection, and on and on and on and on. Unexplainable and unreasonable. The cryptic words upset the eyes unless it is truely interpreted in the eyes. Spiraling down in shades of blue, the rose dies away, the red fades. And soon, all is black.
     
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    a life in ashes

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    wow that's really powerful, extremely emotional. i hope it was successful in letting out what you needed to let out. keep on writing
     
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    JohnnyB

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    My God! That's some powerful words. I especially like the last part. How long did it take you to do this?
     
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    i think this is a perfect example of how you can get emotions out in a constructive way instead of lossing all hope and doing something stupid, like die. i actually do this quite often as it's such a good release. better that counciling anyday!

    your brave to post this, but well done. it's a very good write! very powerful, emotional.
     
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    minusxerø

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    I would say 15 minutes or so to write this.

    Thanks for the positive feedback. I was looking back at it and thinking that it was written by some insane psycho person I don't know, even though it really was me.

    Just more proof that the best writing is done while in a state of depression.

    But it did it's duty of keeping me alive, and for that, I'm proud of it. Thanks for the feedback!
     
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    Heavy is the Louis

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    I know how you feel man. I usually let out things like that when in a state of depression. And it's true, the best comes out of a state of depression.

    But I have to say, that was pretty good. Excellent job.
     
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    fallenangel

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    here, here my friend.
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Well done , - 0.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    Nice work. Didn't have time to read it when it was first posted and now everyone has taken what i wanted to say :(

    Oh well, great job.
     
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    ChooseYourPoison

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    Very nicely written; good job.
     

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