“Chaotic Dreams” “Chaotic Dreams” Ear drums burst to sound of the collapse Watching my world crumble down around me Standing in the ruin of my dreams, my world gone I pick up the debris of our relationship Try to put it all back together, but I fail as one Wanting you to know how I feel but your to far We are worlds away, nothing is what you say Broken promises shake fate in my face Something is so wrong/ when I turn and you not there/ It’s easy to forget/ easy to push you away/ but when the pain mixes with rage/ I don’t care The ash covered asphalt, this ruins partly my fault Sticks stones, glass and thorns rip to your bones Duality, signs of insanity, your world made of clones Step down, inside breakdown, worship celebrities on thrones Your addiction, is the reason, I left you Take pleasure in pain, insane, evil consumes you Touches me, change I see, chaos is mine to give Mixed messages, violence in flashes of darkness Needs, for a needle, sick cycle spins again for the heartless Blood drips, lips blistered, ears polluted by the bastard youth Minds gone, addiction it’s on, and nothing that’s said is truth Fake and cryptic, mistakes sift through the sick lie of life Decision, you can’t run from this life is not bliss, but strife Make it; it is what you want it to be, please come back to me [X2] Something is so wrong/ when I turn and you not there/ It’s easy to forget/ easy to push you away/ but when the pain mixes with rage/ I don’t care [Leads into a mini guitar solo, then breaks down into just drums (or a beat)] Stop this, running this way is madness Red runs on the surface with a purpose Mind riots against you in the ruckus Stop this, the chaos is endless Finding peaces of your soul is useless Don’t you know baby girl, I am were your heart is Something is so wrong/ when I turn and your not there/ it be so easy to forget you/ but the problem is/ I/ still/ love you
thanks again for the comments, i just edited it and gave it a new ending and diferent choris, this one works better for the band. I felt after such a strong rap verse, it needed something at the end, it didnt feel right the original way, so i took out the rock end and adden in the rap
You know unless your saying its bad meaning good then you really shouldn't put it in those terms,you should say why you don't like it and what could be improved,not just 2 words :argh:
You know unless your saying its bad meaning good then you really shouldn't put it in those terms,you should say why you don't like it and what could be improved,not just 2 words :argh: [/b][/quote] Yeah thanks man for sticking up for me. I don’t know if you mean bad as in badass, or bad as in it sucks ass, please tell me. If you think it sucks I don't mind criticism, in fact I welcome it if it is constructive.