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    Darcy

    Darcy LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    This is really, really old. I don't think I've posted it before, and even if I have, I just edited it anyway. So yeah, tell me what you think of my extremely old lyrics that I dug out of my computer.

    Change Something
    I woke up again, I found only more answers
    To questions in line behind lectures and rants
    I got choked up again after just one more glance
    Or I lost one more chance but it all looks the same

    Chorus:
    I was perfectly drawn
    I was still and dead-on
    Not in tact but on cue
    I was made out of you
    I was perfectly fine
    All the right lies combined
    Now you've permanently
    Carved yourself into me

    I dropped it again only I hit the floor and
    I watched myself go as I fell to the deep end
    It was only a curse but it only got worse
    I'm shallow as you and it all looks the same

    Chorus:
    I was perfectly drawn
    I was still and dead-on
    Not in tact but on cue
    I was made out of you
    I was perfectly fine
    All the right lies combined
    Now you've permanently
    Carved yourself into me

    I picked up my mess and found only reminders
    To make myself clear I was hiding behind more
    Intentions for good and the thought that I could
    Make this right in the end but it all looks the same
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    Even more spectacular rhyming, and I really, really heart this very much, it's resplendent.
     
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    Darcy

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    Aw, thankyou dear. You always have such nice things to say.
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    And you always have such nice things to write, so it's a giving and getting thing. It makes me happy when I read something beautiful.

    One thought, though.

     
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    Darcy

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    Haha @ my typo.

    Edited!
     
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    Will

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    I really like this. The chorus is outstandingly well-crafted.
     
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    Darcy

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    Thanks Will. <3
     
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    Canadian Joe

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    Me likey very muchy :thumbsup:
     
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    Darcy

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    Thanks. ^_^
     

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