Burn

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    Friskey™

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    Burn

    I see you falling down again
    I won’t pick you up again
    Because I see you with your mentor
    Trying to make it a living hell
    And you’re driving me crazy
    I'm screaming my guts out
    You’re hearing my every word
    When I say this clearly

    Where will you be?
    When the end of the world comes
    So stop playing these mind games with me
    You’re hurting me more
    The heartache won’t go away
    The sickness your life’s for
    So go burn somewhere else

    Because I'm tired of your crying
    You’re not crying on my shoulder anymore
    You lost my trust
    You lost my love
    I want to forget you
    Erase you from my mind

    I'm sick and tired
    Of your stupid games
    Your helpless lies
    And your stupid differences
    You’re hearing my every word
    And I hope you hear this clearly
    So go burn somewhere else
     
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    Amanda

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    Wow... there's some SERIOUS emotion there. That's really good. I've read your other stuff too, it's all really great. Have you ever considered maybe publishing your stuff?
     
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    Messy Marj

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    That's awesome. Indeed, maybe you should consider about publishing your work. From what I've read now of your work, it's all good.
     
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    aki*lp

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    wow!that was indeed a very emotional poem ...as the previous two people said and i will agree that your literary work is really good and you may start publishing your work
    keep on writing.You have the support of the lpa members! :)
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    I've read some of your other stuff but I really think you did an excellent job on this one.
     
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    a life in ashes

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    E.M.O.T.I.O.N-i like it, i like it alot, its well done.
     
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    Hybrid Meteora

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    GOOD work! I agree with all the others!
     
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    XoX-Jelly_Bean-XoX

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    Man Your Good! Where do you get your ideas??
     
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    sickcycle

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    This was nice, reminds me of my ex-girlfriend and myself, good job! :thumbsup:
     
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    Friskey™

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    Your not the only one :lol:

    Thanks for the comments BTW! :)
     

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