Black Tears

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    Anya

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    a recent song I made a few minutes ago, I like it. Rate it, tell me what you think.

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    fall into me
    and fill in what's missing
    the missing pieces that have fallen
    everthing that was out of place
    is in my skin it's crawlin'

    how can these tears go away
    with a simple touch of your hand

    how this emptiness lasted
    is what i'll never understand

    with your peacful presence
    and face like a lonley child
    you make everything for me
    so perfect
    so complete
    so undeniably worth while

    and with these words I tell you
    that your the only one for me

    all alone inside
    I close my eyes
    what happened all along
    staring inside
    trying to find
    beneath me what I did wrong

    I stare along your shadows
    black tears fall and contrast against it's color
    but in the darkness you can't see, I..
    I need you here now and forever

    alone inside
    I close me eyes
    trying to see what lies beneath

    alone inside
    I try to find
    the shadows that follow
    through my empty grief

    I can't go along wishing everyday
    that you'd aknowledge my presence

    I'll always be here
    morning and night
    for your sweet smile of heaven
     
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    Ooo, I like it a lot.


    ^^My favorite part.


    Good job. :D
     
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    Thanks! Your the first to post! :D
     
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    Hm. I didn't see this before.

    It's really awesome, Anya. I love it. Great job.
     
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    I'm special. B)
     
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    Thanks. :D


    And yes allmighty your specail. :lol:



    I dunno what to call you..so I guess i'm just gonna call you allmighty? :mellow:
     
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    Shane, :).
     
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    Oh okay. Shane it is. :lol:
     
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    Oh okay. Shane it is. :lol: [/b][/quote]
    :p

    You can call me Bob if you want to, or James, or whatever. lol I don't care, but just in case you wanted to know my name, there it is..was..or whatever.



    Yeh.. :D
     
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    :p

    You can call me Bob if you want to, or James, or whatever. lol I don't care, but just in case you wanted to know my name, there it is..was..or whatever.



    Yeh.. :D [/b][/quote]
    Okay BOB. :mellow:








    :shifty:
     
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    Awesome song, Anya!
     
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    Nice work! :D
     
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    Nice song!
    I like it lots :D
     
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    Well i'm glad you all like it..
     
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    hmm i dont really like it too much. i guess its not really the kind of lyrics im interested in. for a rating though id give it a 4/10. but hey dont take it personally its just my point of view alrite.
     
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    No, i'm not gonna get mad over it. If you don't like it I can't force you..but next time if you don't like the song really, don't post. That way you won't have to offend the writer.
     
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    well your asking us to rate it so i did...you cant expect everyone to say its great...its just not logical...but if you are asking for people to rate it then thats what will happen alriotey
     
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    Aww it's purdy. I love it! ^_^
     
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    Yeah I know, I wasn't saying it in a rude way, your right sorry. Just got a little offended you can't help that.. but sorry.


    And thankyou Derek! :D
     
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    I love the bit, fall into me and black tears fall and contrast against it's color.

    Very cool. :thumbsup:
     

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