Black Tears

a recent song I made a few minutes ago, I like it. Rate it, tell me what you think.

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fall into me
and fill in what's missing
the missing pieces that have fallen
everthing that was out of place
is in my skin it's crawlin'

how can these tears go away
with a simple touch of your hand

how this emptiness lasted
is what i'll never understand

with your peacful presence
and face like a lonley child
you make everything for me
so perfect
so complete
so undeniably worth while

and with these words I tell you
that your the only one for me

all alone inside
I close my eyes
what happened all along
staring inside
trying to find
beneath me what I did wrong

I stare along your shadows
black tears fall and contrast against it's color
but in the darkness you can't see, I..
I need you here now and forever

alone inside
I close me eyes
trying to see what lies beneath

alone inside
I try to find
the shadows that follow
through my empty grief

I can't go along wishing everyday
that you'd aknowledge my presence

I'll always be here
morning and night
for your sweet smile of heaven

 

Ooo, I like it a lot.

^^My favorite part.


Good job.

 

Thanks! Your the first to post!

 

Hm. I didn't see this before.

It's really awesome, Anya. I love it. Great job.

 

I'm special. B)

 

Thanks.


And yes allmighty your specail.



I dunno what to call you..so I guess i'm just gonna call you allmighty?

 

Shane, .

 

Oh okay. Shane it is.

 

Oh okay. Shane it is. [/b][/quote]


You can call me Bob if you want to, or James, or whatever. lol I don't care, but just in case you wanted to know my name, there it is..was..or whatever.



Yeh..

 

You can call me Bob if you want to, or James, or whatever. lol I don't care, but just in case you wanted to know my name, there it is..was..or whatever.



Yeh.. [/b][/quote]
Okay BOB.

 

Awesome song, Anya!

 

Nice work!

 

Nice song!
I like it lots

 

Well i'm glad you all like it..

 

hmm i dont really like it too much. i guess its not really the kind of lyrics im interested in. for a rating though id give it a 4/10. but hey dont take it personally its just my point of view alrite.

 

No, i'm not gonna get mad over it. If you don't like it I can't force you..but next time if you don't like the song really, don't post. That way you won't have to offend the writer.

 

well your asking us to rate it so i did...you cant expect everyone to say its great...its just not logical...but if you are asking for people to rate it then thats what will happen alriotey

 

Yeah I know, I wasn't saying it in a rude way, your right sorry. Just got a little offended you can't help that.. but sorry.


And thankyou Derek!

 

I love the bit, fall into me and black tears fall and contrast against it's color.

Very cool.