Beware the Soul [final version]

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    sickcycle

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    Beware the Soul

    Schemes run wild as dreams fall
    And to eternity still thoughts float
    Handfuls of regret for one and all
    With wisdom bound in your throat

    And into the cryptic dark of the soul
    Down past the hollow fog of our virtue
    Guileful Words corrupt and takes their toll
    While doubt and despair choke you

    Such a thing, corrupt will it be if let alone
    Hopelessly entangled by shadowy fiends
    But the seeds of redemption can still be sown
    If arrogance is silent, and sovereignty sings

    Beware the soul, for inside she sleeps
    Love can mend, but hate will consume
    Feeling the lost, hearing their weeps
    Into fire we are cast, are eternal tomb
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    I didnt like the way the first version went, liked the thought just not the exicution, thus i revmaped it to were I think it fits best, more of an Edger A. Poe style.
     
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    ChooseYourPoison

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    Gimme your talent. Now.
     
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    damotherofevil

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    that's great
     
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    sickcycle

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    thanks guys, i really appreciate it
     
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    Good job.
     
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    arT saveS

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    I thought it was excellent.
     
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    sickcycle

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    thank you!
     

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