Be Patient...

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by palingenesis, Oct 14, 2006.

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    palingenesis

    palingenesis Well-Known Member

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    When I left I found the letter
    I had cuts so big they found my rusty veins
    Whenever I breathe it hurts
    This is pain

    I'd hoped I wouldn't find that letter
    But when I look at my wounds...
    They remind me of you
    And I never know what to do

    That letter nearly killed me
    The blood left was every color you aren't
    I can't remember the last time I said your name
    No matter.....they are all the same

    I hate that letter now
    I burnt it with my own eyes
    See me now and see me later
    It doesn't matter when

    Now here I am with your letter
    Regretting every empty word
    If only I had waited
    Did you get the letter I sent her?
     
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    Seinfeld

    Seinfeld We are the nobodies LPA Super Member

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    To be very honest...I don't really like it...it's not bad though...don't get me wrong...it just...doesn't seem smooth to me...somewhat unclear as to what's going on...like...burnt with your own eyes?...or...your rusty veins? (that's understandable if you're refering to being a machine or something close to that...)...oh well...maybe it's just me ^_^
     

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