Bare Fangs( feed back please)

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    Red Union

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    For this one I dump my entire rhyming scheme tried something different so bear with me and I would like to here how I could tighten it up well here we go
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    Bare Fangs
    Walking down this road of humility/ I think of the actions that I’ve done/ to cause the world of pain/ that comes on to me/I got to leave you with something/ in return/

    Jealousy/ pulls at me/leave it to you/ to cause all these feelings/ that I hate/keeps peeling away/ at the surface of my soul/that sea above the hole/ I called my heart/

    Chorus: You keep pushing/ and pushing/ until I bare my fangs/keep pushing/ and pushing/ until I rip your soul out/ keep pushing/ and pushing/and pushing/to make me bleed/

    I try to forget/ all the things that were said/ I try to admit/ everything I done was wrong/ fall from grace/ is what I’m accused of to be/I try to run away/trying to hide my face/ until you put me in my place/

    Chorus: You keep pushing/ and pushing/ until I bare my fangs/keep pushing/ and pushing/ until I rip your soul out/ keep pushing/ and pushing/and pushing/to make me bleed/

    Better stop playing with the devil in disguise/Might want to start waving good bye/ because baby when I burn/ It’s all the ones close to me/ who maybe get hurt/

    Pride/ lifts me/ to new heights/ above all of you ants/Love/ ain’t all it’s cracked to be/with the ones you love the closest/ being the ones who hurt you the deepest/

    Chorus: You keep pushing/ and pushing/ until I bare my fangs/keep pushing/ and pushing/ until I rip your soul out/ keep pushing/ and pushing/and pushing/to make me bleed/
    Chorus: You keep pushing/ and pushing/ until I bare my fangs/keep pushing/ and pushing/ until I rip your soul out/ keep pushing/ and pushing/and pushing/…/keep pushing and pushing/ Until you see My Fangs/

    Walking down this road/leaving the world I knew/ behind/seeing the muddle few/ in time/​
     

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