Back Off

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    Sytheek

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    This is one of the first songs I have written in awhile it's about child abuse from parents. I'm pretty happy with the way it has turned out but I wanna change the bridge. Anyways please give me some feed back and what you think of the song.

    ~~~ Back Off ~~~

    +++Verse One+++
    I've put up with your sh*t for way too long
    You think you're always right and I'm always wrong
    Your ignorance keeps you from listening to what I have to say
    It doesn't always have turn out this way

    This constant abuse is taking it's toll
    This anger inside is darkening my soul
    I'm gonna put it to end right here
    Gonna fight you back without fear

    +++Pre - Chorus+++
    What if I had the power to control you
    Helpless like me nothing you can do
    Giving you words for you to cry on
    Brutal beatings for you to die on

    Coming home to a beast with bad intentions
    Bent out of shape with a parental suggestion
    Making up excuses for your bad habits
    You can't force my love, you're never gonna have it

    +++Chorus+++
    Back off, and get away
    Hit you back
    Watch me snap
    [Just get away]
    Back off, and get away
    Hit you back
    Push you back
    [Just get away]
    Back off, and get away
    Hit you back
    Watch me snap
    Just get away!!!

    +++Verse 2+++
    Heavy thoughts of you are in my head
    Bad memories of the past better left unsaid
    And even if they were gone, It wouldn't change you
    I Can't forget what all that you put me through

    Do you enjoy my suffering/humor in my pains
    Do you even care/or am I another one of your shames?
    Do you know what this anger is leading me to?
    Or are you a selfish illegitimate offspring of unmarried parents and all you think about is you

    +++Bridge+++
    I just need you to back off
    And get away from me
    You need your space
    And so do I

    ++Chorus+++
    Back off, and get away
    Hit you back
    Watch me snap
    [Just get away]
    Back off, and get away
    Hit you back
    Push you back
    [Just get away]
    Back off, and get away
    Hit you back
    Watch me snap
    Just get away!!!

    ++Pre - Chorus+++
    What if I had the power to control you
    Helpless like me nothing you can do
    Giving you words for you to cry on
    Brutal beatings for you to die on

    Coming home to a beast with bad intentions
    Bent out of shape with a parental suggestion
    Making up excuses for your bad habits
    You can't force my love, you're never gonna have it

    +++Chorus+++
    Back off, and get away
    Hit you back
    Watch me snap
    [Just get away]
    Back off, and get away
    Hit you back
    Push you back
    [Just get away]
    Back off, and get away
    Hit you back
    Watch me snap
    Just get away!!!
     
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    Madias04x

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    Hey, thanks for the reply on my song. I really like your song a lot. I have never been abused before, but this is the first song I've read that really shows your emotions. I never seen such strong words brought together in a beautiful song....nice work! :D
     
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    Sytheek

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    Thanks, I like yours alot too. Keep it up.
     
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    Lpmoni

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    Damn, that is awesome! I love it
     
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    Sytheek

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    Thanks ^_^
     
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    Evi

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    I think it's really good
     
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    Sytheek

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    Thanks Man. :D
     
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    Nowhere Kid

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    Two thumbs up. That's awesome work! :)
     
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    linktolinkinpark

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    The bridge could be this:


    Just back off and get away,
    I dont want your abuse today
    i'll stop it now, i'll get you back,
    I see now, the strength you lack
    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
    but i really like the song, 10/10! keep working, ur a grest writer! :D
     
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    Sytheek

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    Hey thanks, your bridge sounds alot better, I'm gonna update it now, thanks again!
     

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