As I Think Of You

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    shinodasbabii

    shinodasbabii Well-Known Member

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    this is the first piece of writing of this.. err.. genre that I've written. It's not done yet but please post on what I have so far..

    I sit on my bed with the knife in my hand, above my wrist
    all thoughts running through me
    how you mocked me, with the life we could of led
    I think of everything that has happened between now and that day in November
    and I realize that even after all the pain you have caused me, I still love you
    but its not even love
    it's obsession, with you and the world I had in front of me
    I think of all the tears you've caused me and I slice down once
    I think of all the smiles I had to fake and how many times I had to say that words "nothing is wrong", and I slice down again, this time just a bit deeper then before
    I let out a cry of pain, but do it again
    I think of how, for these whole four years, you had me trapped in the thought of you..
    and me and everything else
    I'm still trapped in it all, I still can't push through
     
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    Link04

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    My personal preference dispises the subject matter. Self mutilation is not cool, nor productive.
     
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    shinodasbabii

    shinodasbabii Well-Known Member

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    ok... I understand. I chose to write it with this content because I have had experience with something like this. I was actually inspired to write about this because a someobe really close to me experienced immense problem.

    but back to the point... yeah I do understand.
     
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    silver.flames13

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    I Like it.
    As a Self-Injury addict, I have to praise you for capturing the true feelings behind the addiction and the actions leading up to the use of SI.
    Great Job.

    ~* Silver
     
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    ahamLP

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    very raw,very direct i should say,but its sad to read that some1 betrayed u or someone else,nevermind the poem is well written and as u have told this is ur 1st attempt at writing anything like this makes it awesome.
     
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    shinodasbabii

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    thanks for the comments ;)
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Good , like it.
     

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