Hey ya, just try to understand the words I'm saing right now They are out of sense, but they're just like my live Yo, can't you close your eyes and look at the picture they are painting Yo, free your mind of the world you think you're LIVING IN Free your soul of all the lies I said you Tring to throw dust in your EYES But it's all over NOW I'M LEAVING you I'll just pick the last train going to the hell try to forget you Are you listening me now It's the true about all your live You died before your birth Wwwwwwwwwhere do I think to go I'm gonna pick the train to the hell I'm gonna change my live forever Wwwwwwwwwhere do I think to go Is there another chance for me Is there another way for me Is there.... Hey ya, just try to understand the words I'm saing right now They are the mirror of my broken soul They are the mirror of what you did with me ........................................what you said to me Wwwwwwwwwhere do I think to go I'm gonna pick the train to the hell I'm gonna change my live forever Wwwwwwwwwhere do I think to go Is there another chance for me Is there another way for me Is there.... But now I'm fighting for my live So go AWAY and leave me alive Wwwwwwwwwhere do I think to go I'm gonna pick the train to the hell I'm gonna change my live forever Wwwwwwwwwhere do I think to go Is there another chance for me Is there another way for me Is THERE
its great lyrically, but u need 2 edit ure grammar n tense better. try 2 make it rhyme if u can . U can see lp ideas in it n sum of ur original ideas but overall its pretty kool , keep it up n take my hints into account ! :