An Abrupt Feeling

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    The Emptiness Machine

    The Emptiness Machine Out of the abyss. LPA Über VIP

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    Here's a poem I could never seem to figure out how to finish. C&C and suggestions are greatly appreciated and welcome.

    An Abrupt feeling

    Extended in the air, a sign
    I know it fades into the background as I move forward
    but I can not see what's behind me
    All I know is that sky has become a little more clear

    The clouds are thick and peaceful
    but through watery eyes they appear gloomy
    Trying to take in the beauty of everything
    I become lost in thought

    Alone or not I drenched
    covered in the feelings that over flow into familiarity
    And everything seems impossible
    It's as if the world is weighing me down
    while the universe is pulling me in a different direction
    They're so contradicting, these thoughts of mine
     
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    Theazninvasion68

    Theazninvasion68 It's like blood to a vampire, our tragic desire. LPA Super VIP

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    I like the imagery of how description was used. It does remind me of a sudden clarity, as if i were to suddenly stop in my ignorance and come to realization, yet somehow stubbornly refuse to believe while aos wanting to.

    :)
     

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