A Kiss A Romance A Suicide

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by Tim2, Jan 8, 2004.

  1. #1
    Tim2

    Tim2 Ambient

    Joined:
    Feb 8, 2003
    Messages:
    1,178
    Likes Received:
    2



    Well, I have a poem to do for homework with the rhyme scheme ''ABCBBB'' and this is what I wrote. It's due pretty soon so please, if you comment hurry :p Tell me what you think please.


    A Kiss A Romance A Suicide.

    My dear, My angel
    We've learned through violence not to trust
    One another without the other
    Her halo, now reduced to only rust
    The blade upon her throat makes it hard to adjust
    Maybe if for just one more thrust

    Is it a barbed wire romance on our minds?
    And my thoughts slowly fading off into the sky
    Like the balloon that slipped
    From her fingers when she was five
    Mascara tears on her cheek from her blue eyes
    I reach out to touch her face but I'm...

    My Dear, Oh My God, My Angel.
     
  2. #2
    Ander

    Ander LPA VIP LPA Super VIP

    Joined:
    Mar 17, 2003
    Messages:
    8,697
    Likes Received:
    4



    rawr. :shifty:
     
  3. #3
    Will

    Will LPA Addicted VIP LPA Addicted VIP

    Joined:
    Aug 25, 2002
    Messages:
    35,486
    Likes Received:
    37



    That's really good.
     
  4. #4
    Andrea

    Andrea best friends. LPA Addicted VIP

    Joined:
    Dec 12, 2002
    Messages:
    34,338
    Likes Received:
    332



    I love it! Excellent job! :)
     

Share This Page